| "Kiss of Life" Reviews/Comments [ 16 ] |
Reviewed By: kokoronagomu [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2012 05:14 EDT
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i can't believe that i hadn't reviewed this... unless i reviewed on ff.n? it's a really great story, i loved the devotion, tenderness and possessiveness he's shown in this. really a great story! ~gin |
Reviewed By: Jesachi [MediaMiner Member] On: October 28, 2010 22:37 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I figured since you were reading/reviewing my stuff, I'd see if you'd written anything. :) THIS WAS FABULOUS! A great interpretation of what Inuyasha would be like should he have faced Kagome's death. I liked his possessiveness, his adamant attitude towards keeping her to himself. I even enjoyed the perspective, though it was confusing a little at times who's POV you were coming from, but I liked the detached narrator feel. Very little dialogue, lots of imagery but all very literal. I liked it. When I have some time, I'll be sure to go back and read through your other one shots. :)
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Reviewed By: inu-kags4ever [MediaMiner Member] On: August 18, 2008 15:17 EDT
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THIS was also one of my favorites! keep up the good work! i love it when inuyasha doen't know when to quite:)
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Reviewed By: aprildiamond [MediaMiner Member] On: January 28, 2008 00:28 EST
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I just re-read this with your revision, still love it, this is about the 4th time I've read it!
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Title: Guess Who?
Reviewed By: Iceberg60 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 24, 2008 22:15 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
EEEEP! I am so happy! The fabulous ladycash has finally written a fic! I am so utterly spechless and proud....if not a little jealous. Ok, maybe a good amount of jealousy is involved, but i love it! You did say you liked the aggressive protective hanyou more then the sensitive indecisive one. Clearly displayed in ths story, eh? Anyways, i urge to continue writing! You have a great knack for it! More then me? Maybe, if not likely.... Regardless, Congratz on your first fic! ^_^
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Reviewed By: kodiaqkitten [MediaMiner Member] On: January 24, 2008 11:44 EST
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Congratulations on your first fic!!! I was completely enthralled. I love the protective beast in Inuyasha!!! Makes me all warm and fuzzy. You should have done this a long time ago. Now that I know you write, I can be one of those fans that constantly harasses you to write another!!!! Anyway, great job. Good story! Flowed well, good attention to detail. 100% enjoyable. Will be waiting for more!!!!
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Reviewed By: Sayuriko [MediaMiner Member] On: January 23, 2008 08:44 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I was taking a break and stumbled upon your story by chance and I'm glad I did! I really liked how you captured Inu's emotions and how he would do anything to save Kagome. Nicely written!
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Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: January 23, 2008 06:00 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wonderful story... really liked it... you did good in mixing all the emotions of everyone from inuyasha, to sango, miroku, shippo and even kirara... also with the people in the village... that was nice... good job... great work...
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Reviewed By: Knittingknots [MediaMiner Member] On: January 23, 2008 04:04 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nicely done, Lady Cash. I liked how you captured the wildness, the not really humanness of Inu, and his fierce devotion to Kagome. Write more!
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Title: A Nice, Short Little Fic
Reviewed By: Seriah Black [MediaMiner Member] On: January 23, 2008 03:13 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I liked it, especially with Inuyasha getting all protective but still determined to do what needs to be done. Why is it rated X though?
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Reviewed By: animelover23 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 22, 2008 22:30 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very good first story. You played out the emotions very well; Inuyasha's desperation and love for Kagome, the gang's worry and concern, even the healer's fear about a rampaging hanyou. You don't see many mole youkai in IY fanfics, a poisonous one at that, though does it really matter with Inuyasha around? As many others have said, its easier to read if there's spaces between paragraphs and dialougue. I also can't wait to see what you can dish out.
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Reviewed By: aprildiamond [MediaMiner Member] On: January 22, 2008 21:52 EST
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Your writing conveys the emotions of the story very well. I felt the desparation of InuYasha and the worry and concern of the rest of the group and most of all of InuYasha's love for his Kagome. Well done.
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Reviewed By: doggieearlover [MediaMiner Member] On: January 22, 2008 19:46 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I enjoyed your first fic very much - you did a nice job with it! That was unique to have mole youkai, and a poisonous one at that. Of course it didn't have a chance once InuYasha entered the picture. And he would never leave her side when she was so close to death - I guess she was lucky that he realized that he did need the help of the others, and at least Sango realized there was no way he'd leave the room. The only suggestion I'd have is what a couple of others have mentioned - put a blank line between your paragraphs so that the story is easier to read. Other than that (which is a formatting issue), it was a very good first fanfic. I look forward to more from you.
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Title: This was your first fanfic?
Reviewed By: Xagzan [MediaMiner Member] On: January 22, 2008 19:13 EST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I had to chuckle at thinking about a mole demon. Very unique. Kagome always seemed to get in trouble some way... But still very fun read, and I agree with roxotaku about the spacing thing.
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Title: Alsome Story
Reviewed By: Breezie [MediaMiner Member] On: January 22, 2008 16:40 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Alsome story, this story got my heart pumping, the rush of being attach and no one around to help you or hear you, having a hard time fighting back scare if you ever see your friends and family again. Then you thought that it was over and the darkness take over you he come, someone you feel safe with the one that is alway by your side is there for your rescue. I give this story 2 thunbs up alsome 1st try . I can't wait to see more of your Great work. You have more guts then I do.
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Title: Good First Try!
Reviewed By: Roxotaku [MediaMiner Member] On: January 22, 2008 15:37 EST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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The story was moving and intense. An excellant first try! But you made one mistake that stood out- and had nothing to do with the story itself. You need to put spaces between your paragraphs and between what is being said - makes it easier to read. I made exactly the same mistake when I put my first chapter of my first story up on AFF.net 4 years ago. Also, a beta would be good - if you want, I can beta for you.
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