| "Don't Ever Let Go" Reviews/Comments [ 11 ] |
Reviewed By: InuKag91 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 13, 2010 01:09 CST
Comment/Review:
This made me cry. ;[ It was magnificant!
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Reviewed By: mrs kdc [MediaMiner Member] On: May 18, 2009 12:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I must say, I really loved this fic. It had me feeling sad and hopeful all at the same time. And even though it required to show some emotion, I could see Vegeta still staying in character :) Good job. There is one thing I'd like to point out, though. You used the word "condone" twice in chapter 9, which basically means to be okay with, when I think you meant to say "condemn," which would be the opposite. "Condoning them and sneering at them was what left me at a disadvantage." Since they're the opposite, this sentence is sort of contradicting itself. Sorry if I seem kinda uppity by pointing this out. Just trying to help :) Anyway, I really enjoyed this story, and I hope to read more of yours soon :-D
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Reviewed By: GirlAnime On: April 16, 2008 03:39 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, this was an insanely detailed story that's taken me most of the day to read (mainly because I'm slow to process things I think x_x) but it's been completely worth it. This has to be one of THE best fictions I've ever read about the B/V relationship. Not only is it psychologically intriguing, but it sticks true to what I feel their characterizations should be. Vegeta is not an easy character to write, nor is Bulma (at least not without portraying a complete stereotype) and the fact you wrote them, without me going 'waaaiiit a minute...' at any part in the story, in itself is pretty darned amazing. Some things to take into consideration, should you ever revise this fic or write more are your use of inserted Japanese words (kami and baka mainly) and your use of 'then' instead of 'than'. No one likes to be harped on about petty things, but I found that the occasional use of these instances really threw the flow of reading off for me. I realize the use of Japanese words is completely personal preference and that the grammatical use of 'then' and 'than' can be rather confusing, but I feel you at least need to know. Other than these two things though the read was extremely enjoyable in all it's angsty, psychological journeying. I hope you continue your writing, as this was very entertaining and enjoyable to read. What a great story. :)
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Reviewed By: UndeadFantasy On: February 03, 2008 08:12 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
mhmmm... it must have been difficult to write this chapter. vegeta is not ooc - considering that he does quite many things he wouldn´t normally do, that´s quite an achievment lol
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Reviewed By: UndeadFantasy On: February 03, 2008 07:38 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
what tension! :-o I hope bulma accepts vegeta, I hope everything will work out!
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Reviewed By: UndeadFantasy On: February 02, 2008 17:39 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
oh fantastic! I gotta go to be now it´s already past midnight here in austria, but I am going to continue reading tomorrow (or today lol) I really love this story! I gotta search you on ff
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Reviewed By: Undeadfantasy On: February 02, 2008 17:14 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
yay vegeta jumps to action-finally! hopefully bulma is going to accept him!
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Reviewed By: Undeadfantasy On: February 02, 2008 16:28 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
oh this is working out nicely lol - I mean- not for bulma (so far) but they are getting closer. I think this developes in a wonderful true romance. thanks so much for writing this!
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Reviewed By: Undeadfantasy On: February 02, 2008 16:08 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG (yes it´s me again) that´s the BEST chapter I´ve read so far! awesome how u described bulmas state... oh damn! vegeta she needs you! *screams* I nearly started to cry and I do not usually cry while watching movies and so on. This is truyl superb!
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Reviewed By: Undeadfantasy On: February 02, 2008 15:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ok, this is getting really interesting! his instincts take control? o.O wuuuuhhh sounds dangerous lol (i like it!) u are a fabulous writer! I love this story! I hope u get tons of reviews!
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Reviewed By: Undeadfantasy On: February 02, 2008 15:23 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this story! thank u so much for uploading it! I´ve never read a story with such a realistic viewpoint on the charas. though I hope it will end up in a good ol´ romance later lol until next time! I gotta read the rest1
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