Reviewed By: Kurisuti Kamae On: February 03, 2008 16:07 CST Rating(s):
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review: Hey I really like the whole set up. I could really understand the girl and you got the point of view and everything right. I really enjoyed this and I think you could trun this into an awesome story. Not a mushy or cheesy fan girl type one but definitely one where she starts figuring more out about him. I would love to see him through her eyes some more. You've written it so the reader feels as if he/she is actually witnessing this. Great Job! and plzzzzzz do update if you think you could make a story out of this. It's very interesting