Title: Disturbing!
Reviewed By: pyrzm [MediaMiner Member] On: February 17, 2008 10:36 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
You have a talent for making me enjoy pairings that I normally avoid. The F/S was amazing, and F creeps me out. My only complaint is that this seems to be several chapters and has perhaps too many things going on. Is this a oneshot? The last part seems tacked on, though it's a good scene. It just doesn't seem to fit in with the rest. If it was a second chapter, in a longer piece, it would make more sense. Also, though I really enjoyed it, the "naughty school girl outfit on a tough guy" is something I've seen across a lot of fandoms. The rest of the piece was so original that it's a bit jarring by comparison.
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