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| "Our Heaven" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: jaimed1968 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 13, 2008 18:07 CDT
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Cool... she's an angel. I wonder what kind of mission she has for him and who the two jerks were that were talking about her. Love this story and eagerly await the next chapter.Thanks for the update.
| Reviewed By: jaimed1968 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 11, 2008 18:51 CST
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I knew that she'd come back, just to tick him off if not completely scare the crap out of him. Poor Duke, he really is messed up with loss over her. I hope that she knocks some sense into him. What is she doing there? Is she alive or dead? What is her purpose and what will Duke do about being able to see her again? Loving the second chapter, keep up the good work.
| Reviewed By: jaimed1968 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 11, 2008 13:08 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a very interesting story. I love how you described the relationship between Pagan and Duke. It pulled at my heart strings seeing how much Duke loved her, but never admitted it to her in 'that' way. Now that she's gone what will he do? Is this just a one-shot or the beginning of a more in depth story? I'm very interested to see where you go if this is to be a multi-chapter story. As for the writing style, I like it. Not much to improve on. Thanks for this story.
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