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| "A Demons Heart" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Title: A Demon Heart
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: May 22, 2008 06:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
| Reviewed By: loretta537 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 27, 2008 08:22 CDT
Comment/Review:
this is a good story, but i have a few problems. 1. you never mention if kagome is done collecting the shikon shards and if she is you never have her wishing she could still see her friends. 2. kagome is in high school, sess couldnt wait one more year, or at least not have become her teacher? there may end up being some big problems about that. 3. you never have kagome telling her family about sess, what happens and how do they react? what do they think of her never coming home that first night? 4. you never describe the changes kagome goes through after mating. sess tells her that her body will change, there's the scene with jaken in the morning then it's been a few weeks and she's in a singing contest. 5. where's shippo? if sess lived 500 years i'm sure kagome will want to know if her son did and meet him again. she may or may not want to see the other demons that she knew, like koga and inuyasha.
| Reviewed By: theblackangels_ [MediaMiner Member] On: February 22, 2008 19:05 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i really like it. its a good thing sessh isnt OVER possesive. -smile- but then again. u can never b 2 sure. i think some gifts xould be like a glass ring. but thats too... i dont know. but i know sessh will be happy . ive never heard thoses sons. but ill try to find them, nonetheless. although im having a little trouble reading... ~sessh- cuase u got a iq of -1000 ~tba- i do not! thats inuyasha. ~inu- hey! im not dumb! ~sessh- wats the capital of newyork? ~inu-uh... ~tba- wats the chinese word 4 america? ~inu- im japanese u onna!(ONNA- WOMAN) i dont know any chinese.!!!!!!!!!! ~tba- oh. yea. i frogot. ~kags- i really like the story. ~sessh- im livin in luxary. ~kags- im with the love of my life. ~tba- its intresting. ~inu- damn y aint i there? ~tba- oh sush! the show's named 'inuyasha' . so get over u not being there. we ALL need a break from u. ~inu- wat do u mean by that? ~tba-sigh- ur . an. idiot. update soon. bye!!!!!! ~TBA~
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