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Reviewed By: cirraxlankart On: April 30, 2010 07:57 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 4 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
so far its really really good...however, I'm afraid you just killed it. I read half way through chapter 24 and now I've stopped and wont reasd furthur...zaraki was once a hollow? sorry, I loved his zanpakuto, I wanted to see where this was going and you've disapointed me. good writing, and good to chapter 23. sorry, but making zarakji an ex hollow is too stupid.
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Title: Story's Awesomeness
Reviewed By: 3HierCiel On: April 10, 2010 06:20 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a wonderful, engaging story. I really enjoy it so far... I want to know what's going to happen with the two trials and especially the interactions between the Gotei 13. (My favorite is Toshiro!) But I've always like Madarame, Yachiru, and the 11th Division. I originally clicked on this story because I thought it was a comedy, crack-fic regarding Zaraki but I was surprised by the level of philosophy and psychology involved, especially during Zaraki's first trip to his mind. I learned lots of nice adages. May I suggest this adage? It's by George Washington, one of my favorites, and it can be found on the American passport. "Let us raise a standard to which the wise and honest can repair; the event is in the hand of God." Other versions say "the rest is in the hands of God." instead of event. Then, after I got sick of all the soliloquies Atonomasturi had, the story took a light-hearted turn. Yay! I really enjoyed the dolls, training, bets, Soi Fon, etc. And finally the action commences! Please update soon! I have to say, you're very good with surprises. Zaraki as a former Hollow, Piecrust as the former captain's son, the world being Zaraki's mind, and so on and so forth. I never see it coming! (I thought Piecrust was Yamamoto's incompetent relative.) I like your writing style too, with just enough description to go by on and very entertaining dialogue. Well, I hope to see another chapter soon. If you keep updating, more people will see your story. By reasons unknown to myself, I stumbled on a list of the most recently updated stories and yours caught my interest. I also support your no-romance approach. It tires things out and one can only take so much fluff. Your story is very captivating, which explains why I' typing this review at six in the morning (pulled an all-nighter). Plus there are plenty of romances out there--it's like the most common genre. PS. In the anime, they really piqued my interest in the Shinigami Women's Association. Now, however, I'm mostly interested in the Eleventh Division (and ten coughcough).Interesting how much is going on in the Bleach world besides Ichigo's life. Sorry for any typos; I'm exhausted. Good night!~
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Reviewed By: IceniQueen [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2010 12:56 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yay! A new chapter! I love this story, and can't wait to see what you've got planned for Kurosutchi (who creeps me out, big time!). Hopefully, it's something awful, which he deserves just for what he's done to Nemu (creepiest line: 'Do you want to be disassembled... again?' Eeeeeeesh...). Keep writing!
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Reviewed By: bairdie On: April 05, 2010 07:41 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
sorry i havent reviewed in ages; this is another decent chapter, im interested in how these new threads will turn out regarding the hearing and the renewed assasination attempts.
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Reviewed By: Boadicea On: March 22, 2010 13:42 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You HAVE to continue this story! I check every day to see if you have updated it, and I immediately read it if you have. I love the way you are handling the characters, and how believable you're making the changes Zaraki (my favorite character) is undergoing. His zanpak-tu is perfect for him! Trust me, there is at least ONE person who is avidly following this story - ME! So please continue - I hate it when authors just drop a story because they think no one is reading it.
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Title: excellent...
Reviewed By: bairdie On: October 31, 2009 18:04 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
sorry i havent reviewed in a while, had a lot of catch up to do lol. this chapter is very interesting for me; your adding a lot of depth to the characters that we only barely see glimpses of in the anime and manga, and what your doing with yamamoto has piqued my interest, i cant wait for more.
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Title: Yachiru's intellegence
Reviewed By: StarbearerTM [MediaMiner Member] On: August 25, 2009 14:42 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I enjoyed that Yachiru could disect a document and be able to tell who wrote it from writing style. Makes me think she uses her cuteness as a cover for far more things. I really liked that hidden side to her nature you showed. Slowly you're revealing more dimensions to Squad 11 that round out these characters and make them even more endearing. Of all the squads in bleach, I always enjoyed 11 for some reason. They seem the most honest and levelheaded of the squads (I may have said that before), but also very clever and cunning. Able to use their opponents weaknesses as strengths. I am intrigued how Zaraki's zanpakuto seems to be helping him work better with his squadmates. Continue with the intriguing writing.
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Title: Another terrific chapter
Reviewed By: StarbearerTM [MediaMiner Member] On: August 11, 2009 12:50 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, where to start. I've been reading this from the beginning and I'm extremely impressed with the Zanpakuto you came up with for Zaraki. You've given it a lot of thought and the personality of the spirit is well developed. Interactions... I love Zaraki's interaction with his squad members. Each of them is fully developed. I find myself wanting to know more about Squad 11, and you provide a great amount of detail here that makes it entertaining. In this specific chapter I like how Zaraki lets Rukia sit on his shoulder. Also the bet that Renji had with Madrame regarding Kuchiki's scarf had me giggling. That is perfectly in keeping with their characters. Having people watch the fight and describe what was going on was a refreshing change from hearing the fight simply described in narrative. You got to see everyone's individual thoughts that way. I am interested to find out what 'Piecrust''s secret it. Also what they end up doing with the dolls.
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Title: Fantastic! Keep em coming!
Reviewed By: Azhwi [MediaMiner Member] On: May 12, 2009 04:39 EDT
Comment/Review:
Really do enjoy this story. It's nice to see Kenpachi's character being developed as well as the relationships between himself and his own team members. Now others are being drawn into the circle. It's great! He may not be crazy about making new "friends" but it definitely makes for an interesting story. Thank you for writing this!
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Title: ooooh
Reviewed By: bairdie On: April 06, 2009 13:56 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
oooh very nice turn at the end there. i must admit that once the hollow dream thing started it seemed quite a likely possiblity, given the way souls seem to work in bleach cannon, but its still a nice little surprise. i also found some of the plans for the revenges amusing. i also found it quite interesting that you put in the possibility of some nemuxyumi. i liked the interactions between unohana and madarame/yumi as well.
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Reviewed By: bairdie On: February 17, 2009 19:15 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
another few good chapters. i got the impression from the fight that the too late ability kinda bit kenpachi in the arse (so to speak) as immediatly after insulting the pigeon he accidentally mortally wounded baldy-chan lol. as ever the writing style and pace are excellent. i cant wait to find out just what kenpachi needs with dolls though
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Title: dolls...
Reviewed By: Star Lyria Uchiha [MediaMiner Member] On: February 11, 2009 18:10 EST
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the dolls again...What have you planed with them...? any way I kinda like the twist where baldy almost gets killed lol... any way, again, another good chapter!
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Title: Nice work;-)
Reviewed By: Kishu On: January 24, 2009 13:03 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Respect! I must admit that your fic is the first one that made me react so far. Original idea and a very catchy style of writing. I also appreciate the intelligent humour and references to wellknown philosophers and writers. I just love the idea of Zaraki Kenpachi reading The Art of War from Sun Tsu. It made me read my copy again:-P Please upload as soon as possible, really looking forward to it. Ganbatte!! "thumbs up"
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Title: again awesome
Reviewed By: Star Lyria Uchiha [MediaMiner Member] On: January 07, 2009 21:43 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
again awesome... I kinda worry about the dolls though.....though I bet it will be something awesome. keep writing this awesome bleach fan fic. also I like how you keep up sorta with the current plot.
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Reviewed By: yuwa [MediaMiner Member] On: December 13, 2008 22:06 EST
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^-^ just dropping by. anyways, nice fic. very very nice!
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