| "10_Communications" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] |
Title: 10
Reviewed By: serry black On: June 29, 2008 17:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have a qustion is red really ash becuse one person told me that yes ash is red than another told me that no ash is not red . can you please e-mail and tell me so i will know becuse i dont know who to belive . here is my addy moondreamer4u@webtv.net
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Reviewed By: Irvin Z. Martinez On: April 02, 2008 21:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wuuu...dark. Who's Bryson? I don't think I've ever seen him in the anime. Anyway.....like I said this chapter was leaning on the side of dark. I must say that the way you manipulate dark material is very crafty. You so it in a way that sheers away at your heart but still keeps you reading. Simply mesmerizing and that is why I your enjoyment factor is as it is. Keep up the good work!
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Reviewed By: Irvin Z. Martinez On: April 02, 2008 21:53 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Cute. Very, very cute I just wish you could have elaborated more on why Red was annoyed as well as given a little more background before that exact moment. Overall though....very cutesy.
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Reviewed By: Irvin Z. Martinez On: April 02, 2008 21:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Lol! Stupid fat ass President....I deal with idiotic authority figures everyday so I can fully understand Red's retaliation. Hopefully he'll think twice before doing something as stupid like that again. But yeah style and spelling still in tact. Shortness not really a factor since it was really funny but in all....very funny and very entertaining.
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Reviewed By: Irvin Z. Martinez On: April 02, 2008 21:46 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well the shortness really did bring the scale down a watt. Your style was not brought down at all though. You still had great voice and assertion....of course it was somewhat rushed and blunt. But either way you still deserve kudos for actually throwing something out there without fear of....unlike me. I respect you for that. Hoorah! (It's my new catchphrase.)
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Reviewed By: Irvin Z. Martinez On: April 02, 2008 21:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yeah, another update. I was somewhat confused when I saw Red on one line and Ash on the other....I originally thought you had accidentally switched alter egos but then I realized that both were fighting for Lance's hand! Very original! Though I'm quite convinced you have done it before. Either way great first little story...I feel sorry for Lance though.
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