| "A Miko and a Youkai in the Future?" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] |
Reviewed By: loretta537 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 12, 2008 03:55 CDT
Comment/Review:
i really like the idea of kagome and sess meeting up in the future, but there are some major inconsistencies in this story (not that i'll stop reading it). like why would you hire a secretary that has a five year degree in business from harvard (for that matter why havard and not a japanese school) a secretary would be good for a kagome that barely managed to pass high school and went to a trade school to become a secretary, but with a business degree she would be looking for a better job than that. also in chapter 1 it sounds like youkai are staying hidden in the world and then in chapter 2 it's seems that everyone is a youkai and that kagome and her friends know if a salesperson they just met is youkai and what type they are. also i'm still wondering how kagome could have graduated highschool 3 years early when at the age of 15 she was traveling through the well to the past...well i suppose you could say that she graduated before she started time traveling but then you would completely have to ignore the stuff with her highschool friends.
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Reviewed By: loretta537 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 11, 2008 07:36 CDT
Comment/Review:
this is a good story so far. i'm just wondering one thing, with kagome spending so much time in the feudal era how did she manage to graduate from highschool three years early? i would think it would have been a few years late or that she would barely manage at all.
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Title: PHEONIX
Reviewed By: janomaru [MediaMiner Member] On: April 10, 2008 23:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
tis is a pretty good story and i love where its going. i'm just wondering if there's going to be some kind of conflict in this story (if you reply to this don't give anything away for me just answer my question with a yes or no pls and thx) now just as a general tip people dont mind waiting a couple more days if it means a longer better written chapter so TAKE YOUR TIME, i've seen too many stories go bad because the authour was in a rush to post another chapter. well any way i hope this review was helpful in at least some way and i wasn't just rambleing sincerly PHEONIX
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