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| "A Day at the Office" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] | Reviewed By: tubaotaku18 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 22, 2008 10:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
You go into great detail in the scenes, and quite a twist at the end. Spelling and grammar errors happen, but you have a great grasp of both concepts 99% of the time and those errors are few and far between. Odd pairing, but very good use of it. I look forward to reading the next chapter of this interesting story. Keep up the good work.
| Reviewed By: JD On: May 03, 2008 19:00 CDT
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I'm not even the person who flamed you. I don't approve of the pairings you write either but what I really have qualms with is that you say you 'HAVE' to cater to the wants of your readers, even if you don't like it. Okay, so are you a TOTAL idiot? That's what I'm forced to ask. You're a fool if you conform to the desires of others if you don't enjoy the result. How DARE you suggest that that BITCH Bra would be a better 'fuck' (as you so quaintly put it) than Videl? And you call yourself a G/V fan. What is wrong with you, Lewis? If you wish to 'cater to the needs' of your readers (you'd think you were some messiah for Gohan fans *rolls eyes*) than why don't you accept that most G/F fans (the audience you SHOULD care about and 'cater' for as you claim to be a constituent to the foermer group) don't like Gohan/NotVidel pairings and would rather not have a fellow fan waster their talents that way? What of THEIR wishes? Oh, and FYI, OC can also mean 'Other character that is not prescribed by canon'. That's what I think that reviewer meant. People feel strongly about this pairing and you have to accept that. If you won't do it for those reasons then do it for this one: You are positively RAPING Gohan's character. You claim to be a major fan then how do you feel knowing that you have desecrated his character more than can be properly conveyed to you. A man who cheats on his wife/ girlfriend who is consumed by the need to have pointless sordid sex for the sake of it? How amoral and abhorred. Do you even see how wrong you are? I hope you know that the only reason anyone might have asked you to write about these blasphemous pairings is because YOU offered to. You are irrational in your supposed 'reasoning'. You say you will not have this flamer 'force' you to write something for them but you say you are 'stretched' to writing for those select few that might enjoy this work of porn. Do THEY pay you? What irks me is that you contradict yourself in every statement you make on the matter. You should feel ashamed that you 'cater' to the desires of people who would enjoy such vulgar work. A boy with his mother AND daughter? A seven/eight your old impregnating a woman older than his parents who also happens to be one of his father's best friends? How disgusting. I implore you, Lewis. Justify THAT.
| Reviewed By: You shit faced pig On: May 03, 2008 01:01 CDT
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You have the nerve to talk about grammar, you retarded pile of pig-shit! It's asshole, by the way, ASSHOLE. Not 'asswhole'. You're disgusting. A filthy pervert. How dare some illiterate mule like you insult another person's grammar when you have the WORST grammar AND spelling I have come across, you hypocritical dipshit. Pay you?! The fact that you are granted your life is something,Lewis fuctard. You WISH you had balls, you transman. You will pay for this. Make no mistake. I was on my last tether with you but you've pushed me over the edge. You see what happens. Oh, and get your cunt-slurping tongue out of the firefly bitch's shit hole! You sickening, slab of horse semen.
| Reviewed By: Eskamo On: April 16, 2008 01:05 CDT
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WOW...got 2 say that was um delicious!!! ive bn such a fan. yur the #1 lemon writer EVER. so intense. truely stay encouraged. cant wait 2 read the next one. Peace.
| Reviewed By: Ny On: April 14, 2008 17:58 CDT
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I have a request if at all possible. Could you write something where Bulma forces Vegeta to watch her have sex with Goku?
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