| "Show Me, Touch Me, Catch Me" Reviews/Comments [ 12 ] |
Reviewed By: VegoSacomoto [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2010 14:25 CDT
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Sakura's mom is trying to see if Sakura really did get pregnet. The fact that she have to be snecky to get this information will make the whole thing worse for Sakura. I fell bad for her.
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Reviewed By: VegoSacomoto [MediaMiner Member] On: July 25, 2009 20:51 CDT
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This is my frist time reading a girl on girl it was good even though Sakura usully get on my nevers she ok in this. how longe will it tack her to relize the Naruto was/is sasukes lover? And whwn will Ino mack a real move to help sakura relize that she really in love with Ino? update soon.
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Reviewed By: CuriousReader On: July 12, 2009 18:18 CDT
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Um, do you plan On writing another chapter for this story?
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Reviewed By: Neji~Hinata~forever On: March 13, 2009 04:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I liked it. It was original and cool not to mention I like how you can keep them in character. You should keep writing because your writing is a good readamd a your starting off a great story. ^_~ ~Have fun~ Neji~Hinata~forever
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Reviewed By: Kaga On: January 05, 2009 22:12 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really have enjoyed this fan fic, everything is very well described and the story actually develops instead of jumping right into things like most stories with the same rating. The characters and all there moves go into very good detail which really brings you into a story which pulls you into the point where this could be actually taking place in the actually naruto show/manga assuming it had a higher rating.
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Reviewed By: puppy eyed [MediaMiner Member] On: October 13, 2008 18:01 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
what did the letter say!!!
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Reviewed By: Chihiro1985 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 09, 2008 21:37 CDT
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Leave yourself open to the possibilities.
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Title: Well written
Reviewed By: Duelingk [MediaMiner Member] On: April 25, 2008 18:14 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Interesting story. I will love to what will happens next. The setting is different (I was kinda expecting the normal ninja setting.). I would like to see more development of their relationship. I would also like to see sakura finish her exploring:}. The personalities didnt really match but that doesn't really matter.
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Reviewed By: cookie dough On: April 17, 2008 00:13 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
You should continue this, because it was a very good beginning. While this first chapter did focus heavily on Sakura, I do hope you write more of Ino's side as well. I want to read how both girls react to this first kiss, their feelings regarding it and for each other, and the struggle to understand all of this. You have the potential here for a thoughtful story if you can write a real side to it. Too many people write an unrealistic view with the girls sharing a kiss, instantly realize their lesbians, and right away hop into bed. Yes, smut can be good sometimes, but other times a story is better when it's believable. So if you do continue, I say since this is an AU, be as bold as you can be with the characters and plot while trying to keep them somewhat in character. And don't worry too much about adding details to any minor characters. The story should be mostly on the main people of the story, Sakura and Ino, and not entirely on the supporting cast if they are not really necessary to the movement of the plot. That's just my opinion.
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Reviewed By: devils_prodigy [MediaMiner Member] On: April 15, 2008 08:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
it was enjoyable and i really hope that you update agian soon... >.
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Reviewed By: Deadberserker [MediaMiner Member] On: April 15, 2008 00:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Over all it was a well written story with an interesting plot, but it didn't really capture any of the characters personalities. I mean Kiba didn't even have Akumaru. Other then this and the other characters lack in personality it was a good story and I hope you continue it.
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Reviewed By: ShingamiLoH On: April 14, 2008 21:08 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please continue, i'm intrested! *does a happy dance* ^_________^
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