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| "Survival" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] | Title: speechless
Reviewed By: latinaB [MediaMiner Member] On: May 27, 2009 18:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
omg! i cant believe you have not updated yet?? what happened?? i am so into ur story... please keep motivated and post. If you have posted else where please email me the link tbnena11@yahoo.com Your story is very creative, original, exciting, speechless with the scenes...
| Reviewed By: lady_dias On: August 28, 2008 07:14 CDT
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I really like this story and I check back every day to see if you've written more. Please don't give up on it. I love the premise and it's very adult but tasteful (if that makes sense). I truly would love to read more because there really aren't too many fics of this caliber. Just...please don't give up. I write fics myself and I sometimes have to sit down and ask myself: "Who am I writing for? Myself or for everyone else?" Do you know what answer I get? I write for myself because I enjoy writing and using my imagination for my favorite characters. I share what I write with others, not for reviews, but because sharing makes me happy. When there are others who enjoys what I've written it kind of feels like an unexpected bonus because, personally, I always feel that my writing could use improvement. Anyways, please don't leave us hanging and don't let the small number of reviews discourage you. Please keep in mind which site you are posting on (most people on MM.org don't seem to leave reviews) and if anything, you might better results posting on someplace like aff.net of ff.net(though ff.net is super restrictive).
| Title: Great!
Reviewed By: Saiya-jin44 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 17, 2008 21:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a great fic! Honestly, I know it's tough waiting for people to review your work and even tougher to get a decent response. In any case, I think you've got a real gem here. Your style and prose are advanced, which is so rare in fanfic-dom (so to speak), and the plot itself is unique in that so far it's unlike any A/U I've personally read. I would only recommend ONE thing, and that is to have someone 'beta' your work - i.e. have a friend or fellow author take a look at it before you post it so he/she can fix spelling/grammatical errors, or suggest sentence structure. The greatest fiction in the world can be suddenly lost when these errors start to distract readers from your dialogue and prose (which are excellent!). For some end notes, the diction of Bulma's 3rd person and the dialogue between Zarbon and Bulma are brilliant. In your characterization, Frieza has a distinct evilness to him that is tough for some authors to capture. Bravo! Please do continue this fic; I would love to see where you take it! I hope the review helped even a bit, and I promise to come back and read more. Thank you!
| Reviewed By: vexille On: June 04, 2008 20:03 CDT
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y'know you should really look at the fact that you have 416 visits and screw the reviews...readers are lazy. but this is awesome! do continue
| Reviewed By: not a member On: May 31, 2008 14:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is really good. I know those words probably don't convey very much, and the lack of reviews sucks. But trust me, there are loyal readers out there who come to this site to see if you're continuing your fics, even if they don't leave reviews. Don't let the lazy people get you down, you've got an incredible story here and you should run with it...especially to parts with Vegeta because he's the best. But, your character development is excellent, so I really hope you continue with this. It's excellent.
| Reviewed By: lady_dias On: May 27, 2008 10:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This fic is absolutely incredible. I love how you capture Bulma's personality so well and I love how she interacts with Zarbon. Frieza is such a pig but he's true to character. He's very self-centered and more then a little childish in the spiteful way he acts and you've written that aspect of him very well. I can't wait until Vegeta puts in an appearance. Keep up the good work and I look forward to reading more.
| Reviewed By: fairjuno On: May 14, 2008 00:43 CDT
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i cant wait for more. wicked and you draged me in, in 2 chaps. :)
| Title: wow...
Reviewed By: trynia merin On: May 13, 2008 21:14 CDT
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This is very gritty and very dark. It reminds me of Lab Monkey, but in a Good way. You've really got the feel for a sympathetic Zarbon and an Evil freeza. I look forward to more.
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