| "Healing a TaiYoukai" Reviews/Comments [ 17 ] |
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Reviewed By: sakdren On: September 23, 2011 21:31 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please update !!!!!!!!!! |
Reviewed By: fgtresw On: June 29, 2011 04:12 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
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Nice story. The only thing that ruins the enjoyment is Kagome breaking Inuyasha's back with the osuwaris. Really, the boy didn't do anything wrong, just wanted to protect her. And she breaks his back? I never liked how she abused her power over him. |
Reviewed By: zylver-sama On: December 23, 2009 00:04 EST
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you are great!! I am in love with your "just roomies" please keep updating
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Reviewed By: snowbirdyoukai [MediaMiner Member] On: August 30, 2008 14:52 EDT
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I know you're busy but I beg of you to please finish this story. I began following this story from the beginning on ASS and kept a look out for it on Dokuga. I'm glad you put it here. The story seems to be nearing the end so if you find any extra time, please update. I'm not giving up on this story.
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Reviewed By: nightshade41230 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 08, 2008 08:23 EDT
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I love the story and the plot I enjoyed it very much and I hope I get to read more soon
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Reviewed By: Ishellmay [MediaMiner Member] On: July 28, 2008 03:17 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
only a few things, please finish your sentences. like when you say rid of, it should say, be rid of. make sure your sentences make sense. other than that, absolutely exellent story. i cant wait to hear more.
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Reviewed By: RadioActiveRedhead [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2008 15:59 EDT
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Hey! Its me again. Like the previous viewer said; Please come to Dokuga.. ASS Is falling apart and soon will be gone. Plus! Because I know that your translator is having problems with "new-day" romanji I know a PERFECT person to help you with it. His/her name is Kodomo Suichi on Dokuga. They are AWESOME at it. Please, look them up and come to Dokuga. Ciao!
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Title: Chapter 10
Reviewed By: WiccanMethuselah [MediaMiner Member] On: June 23, 2008 14:17 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am so glad that I followed you here from A Single Spark, AND that you have graciously decided to continue writing this story. I love your work and look forward to reading more as your busy life permits. Thank you so much for coming back to us! :D ~~Wiccan~~ PS - I would respectfully ask, though, that you consider posting on A Single Spark's new sister site, Dokuga.com. It is very user-friendly and the owners of the site are very author-friendly as well. Again, thank you for continuing to write!!
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Reviewed By: serenitydigo [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2008 16:25 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow please update soon
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Reviewed By: FluffyLady [MediaMiner Member] On: June 07, 2008 18:35 EDT
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okay, i followed this story on ASS and i love it. i just think it's waaay overdue for another chap! ;D FL
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Reviewed By: Fairy goddess [MediaMiner Member] On: May 26, 2008 13:27 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG! Excellent! I love this story and your other story! You are an excellent writer. As for grammar and such I don't give a crap! I was so into your story that I didn't notice anything amiss! Your energy shows in your work, which tells me you truly like writing. I am so glad I read your story and I can't wait to read more. You are a unique writer, I love your story line. I love the way Kagome and Sesshy are falling in love, or have fell, it will be interesting to see how he handles it and to watch Inuyashia deal with it. I do feel bad for him, he just lost Kikyo and is still hurting and confussed. There is a lot going on but not so much that you are confussed I can't wait to read more. In your story is Kagome Shippo's mother figure or is he more close to Miroku? I know he was afraid of Sesshy so maybe that's what he stuck with Mirku? I did like how you wrote up Inuyashia's jealousy as she cared for Sesshy. That was kinda cute. Your awesome! I can't wait for more on this story and the other. Thanks! Much Love Fairy Goddess
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Title: Omg omg omg omg omg!
Reviewed By: Sesshomaru_Kagome_lover_4ever [MediaMiner Member] On: May 26, 2008 05:36 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I THINK THAT IT IS FUCKING SWEET!!!!! I MEAN IT TO DUDE. IT IS RADICAL!!!!!!!! I'VE SEEN IT BEFORE AND HAVE THOUGHT OF READING IT... BUT THEN SAID I DIDN'T FEEL LIKE IT.. WHEN I READ THE SUMMARY AGAIN.. I QUICKLY READ IT AND STUFF!!!!!!!!!!!! I THOUGHT THAT I WAS GOING TO DIE WHEN KAGOME GOT HURT!!!!!!!! I THOUGHT IT WAS SWEET WHEN KAGOME RISKED HER LIFE FOR FLUFFY-KUN!!!!!!!!! LOL. PLEASE PLEASE......... PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! UPDATE VERY VERY VERY SOON.. OR I JUST MIGHT DIE!!! AND YOU WOULDN'T WANT THAT.. LOL. -Angel
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Reviewed By: taixishi On: May 24, 2008 06:41 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
The overall concept of your story is not bad, however there are some stylistic and grammar issues which take away from full enjoyment of the story. I didn't read the "original" version (Heal Me) so I don't know to what extent these errors were already present before you took over and revised the story; however, I do notice that these mistakes continue throughout all the chapters you have uploaded so far (e.g. through Ch. 10 so far). These include basic mistakes (such as misusing "too" versus "to" -- this problem recurs throughout) as well as frequent other spelling errors that do tend to distract the reader from focusing on the story. The good news is that these errors are very straightforward to fix. The other comment I have is that a lot of the time (especially when you're describing Kagome and Sessh's developing feelings for each other, but also in terms of other descriptions) the writing tends to bog down and become very verbose. This isn't a consistent problem throughout the entire story (again, good news) but you may want to pay more attention to streamlining your descriptions especially when describing emotions. It's clear you're trying to convey the characters' angst and confusion at their unexpected growing feelings for each other, but this can be done with less repetition (and it would make the writing far more readable). All that being said, the story is not bad (I don't often write reviews, unless I find some worthwhile qualities about the story, and so the fact that I'm writing this review is evidence that you're doing a good job with the basic story). Mostly, the issues I see are largely easy to fix (e.g. the grammar and spelling mistakes) and/or stylistic choices (e.g. the verbose descriptions). I look forward to future chapters! - taixishi
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Reviewed By: -xkagomex- [MediaMiner Member] On: May 23, 2008 22:52 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this story it has all the right things at the right time with all the right situations!I was lucky enough that I came across this story in the afternoon and only a few short hour later you had updated but now sadly I have to wait :( btw If any of the Inuyasha gang get killed I can not be held accountable for my actions. Oh yeah and your other story was very good also!! :D I'm hoping you will update that as well. And so I had no choice but to give you a rating of all 10's!! Your new official Fan and addict Danni aka -xkagomex- or HyperWithLove what ever floats your boat.
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Reviewed By: yusukekuramasgirl [MediaMiner Member] On: May 23, 2008 19:21 EDT
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please update again soon. i would like to know what happens with sesshomaru and kagome. you sure do know how to keep somebody wondering about what is going to happen next.
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