| "The Night Club" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] |
Reviewed By: weird writer roxas [MediaMiner Member] On: May 28, 2008 12:55 CDT
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thanks you for tell'in me some stuff i need to improve on i'll see what i can do
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Reviewed By: xande On: May 28, 2008 11:54 CDT
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Sounds like an good concept for a story but your style of writing is not very detailed. I'm not spelling or gramer nazi(as you can see, by this comment) but you should really use "you" and "your" instead of u and ur. it makes it hard to read when you have to translate chat speak :(
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Reviewed By: Mabbline991220 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 27, 2008 18:17 CDT
Comment/Review:
well your story is alright... but you should add a little bit more desricption and dialoge
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