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| "Sufferance" Reviews/Comments [ 11 ] | Reviewed By: priscel [MediaMiner Member] On: May 22, 2005 06:24 CDT
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OH in the first review, 'I'm Duo with just numb' that doesn't make sense it was supposed to say 'I think Duo woul become numb' *smiles*
| Reviewed By: priscel [MediaMiner Member] On: May 22, 2005 06:22 CDT
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...But he finds comfort in there presense and hoe the demon is stranglely silenced by Heero. Now with Heero?! I dunno! Maybe it wants to kill him because he can't read him and It hates that it can't read him?! Two- he sleeps, goes through torture type things and the boys have to gag him to keep him silent and all their efforts fail in waking him. And when he wakes on his own, his snap open and he just stares blankly up. Then the demon realizes it took him too far and didn't know that being trap in this kind of sense could be more hellish than the boy ignoring him. It then feels more than what little concern it had shown earlier, it regrets, and screams even though Duo no longer hears him. On the outside, Duo's in shock and the temperature in the entire room drops and the rush to try and help him. Quat's calming presence soothing him, heero's blocking out the demon's rants that Duo no longer cares about, threats that It'd get him again in his sleep if he didn't move. hmm... i'm tapped out for the moment, if you can drop me aline at where you had particular problems at and I could offer more helpful suggestions. gotta go *huggles*
| Title: ideas
Reviewed By: priscel [MediaMiner Member] On: May 22, 2005 06:14 CDT
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I dunno where to begin, I saw your bio and you said ideas are needed (I wish it were a bit more specific as to what blocks you came to with this fic, and then I could offer better suggestions) so hear are bunches... One- (I dunno how you feel about ncs) but the torment that IT has planned could involve that, it has never done anything like that to Duo based on what was written. It could use Wufei's image to do this even though it pointed out that Duo isn't quite aware that he is attracted to Wufei, but It saw it and knew it was the same for Wufei. As I mentioned before Duo passes out, probably midstep in going some where, cuz that's very likely to happen without him knowing it and one of the guys find him and made he's quiet for hours and hours that they all thing he's ok and start to fall asleep when he screams and then starts their desperite attempts to wake him. When he wakes, but the blood doesn't fade away and he's skittish of them all and won't let them come near him and gives in to covering his ears as It laughs loudly, say all sorts of demeaning things trying knowing it's near cuspice of breaking his resolve, and then Heero touches him and there's silence... and he passes out and they fix him up the best they can. Perhaps some how get either Wu or Heero to sleep beside him with a woebegone expression even though he's having problems trying to separate reality from the demons play and torture in his head. ...
| Reviewed By: priscel [MediaMiner Member] On: May 22, 2005 06:10 CDT
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...It was using the image of kittyQuat, but from what was said - is it that It can only use the images of Duo's dead? Kay I've talked enough *smiles* if it's not too much trouble could you tell if this is one of the dead fics? Thank you for share your beautiful works. And forgive me if I babbled unnecessarily in this.
| Reviewed By: priscel [MediaMiner Member] On: May 22, 2005 06:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ok!! i tried posting at your site but it severally cut the review and ff . net won't let me post because over load or something but here's what I was trying to say .... Hiee!! me again! *chuckles to self* What a story!!! I can't wait to see what happens next, I only this isn't one of the dead fics, its so well written with solid foundatoin much like many of your stories and it surprises me everytime when there isn't more to read. Heero is every the mysterious one and It adds to the mystery of why It so dislikes Heero. It seems that it was becoming irritated at Duo asking why and it was a change for It to attempt to placate Duo, telling him he needn't be concern, telling him that it won't be his fault even though It contradicts itself by saying what Duo felt, Duo's guilt was a trifling thing to It. Ohhh, my imagination, the vivid and concoctive thing it is, wonders what It has in store for Duo when he passes out from his no sleep streaks? It must be more than the usual because I'm Duo with just numb it out, or block it out after hours of the same thing, even in dreams it feels like an eternity. I've had a dream once that was an entire life time and woke up gasping for some sense of time and place that was familiar to the dream. *smirks* sorry off topic, Yes i wonder what It has planned and if in the dreams it plans to use Wuffers' image? oh in chap or part 2, Duo had said that Solo was alive before we knew it was solo he was talking about and for a while I thought perhaps
| Reviewed By: Lemon Princess [MediaMiner Member] On: October 02, 2002 23:04 CDT
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What could I do to make you write more of this? I love it! Such an original story! How is Duo gonna battle this thing? I wanna know! And he can't kill Heero. I wonder why he wants to?Please write more soon! | Reviewed By: Lemon Princess [MediaMiner Member] On: October 02, 2002 20:16 CDT
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Have fun watching The Exersist? LOL! I find it interesting how you've used it to come up with this plot line, since I know that only the prologue will be around it. Can't wait to see what happens! Ok, on chapter 1 for more reading... | Reviewed By: Dreamweaver On: September 30, 2002 22:47 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Poor Duo. Pls write more soon! Does Duo have to play prison guard to the demon forever? If he does, does he get a longer life? I'm VVEEERRRRYYY into supernatural and fantasy stories so I LOVE this fic. I just want more of it! | Reviewed By: ShinoMegami [MediaMiner Member] On: August 17, 2002 18:42 CDT
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I love it. I can't wait to read the next parts. | Reviewed By: Storm_410 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 08, 2002 13:06 CDT
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Interesting... very interesting even if it is a bit scary.
This is deffinetly a new concept (at least the first of its kind that I've ever read) and very... I wnat to say amusing but it doesn't really go with the mood of the story, yeah know? Anyways I'm really enjoying it. It seems that some of the best stories are the ones nobody has read. It's a pity.
Well keep updating. I cant wait for the next parts. ^_^
Storm
storm_410@yahoo.com | Reviewed By: Storm_410 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 08, 2002 13:05 CDT
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Interesting... very interesting even if it is a bit scary.
This is deffinetly a new concept (at least the first of its kind that I've ever read) and very... I wnat to say amusing but it doesn't really go with the mood of the story, yeah know? Anyways I'm really enjoying it. It seems that some of the best stories are the ones nobody has read. It's a pity.
Well keep updating. I cant wait for the next parts. ^_^
Storm
storm_410@yahoo.com |
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