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| "Persistence" Reviews/Comments [ 15 ] | Reviewed By: Kags521 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 27, 2009 19:22 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it! Your story was the BOMB! Ofcourse chapter 24 had me crying and I was curssing in everyway I could think of...I almost didn't read chapter 25 until curiosity took over and I read it and I think it's a better ending...but Overall it was really great!
| Reviewed By: Lady Hiroko [MediaMiner Member] On: May 31, 2009 02:33 CDT
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For an AU--which I don't like reading much--this was kick ass. Though you nearly killed it with the first ending. I was happy with the second ending especially after they went through hell and back 50 times over. It was awesome. I giggled from beginning until end (when I came to the first ending which I near literally screamed in protest).---10 for everything.
| Reviewed By: handypup [MediaMiner Member] On: December 25, 2008 12:36 CST
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i've been reading this from the beginning and have greatly enjoyed it. I was somewhat disappointed with the ending, however. It's not because I wanted there to be a happy ending(your alternate seemed very rushed and not as exciting as the rest of the story), It just seemed like such an anti climax; i know, how can the death of a major character be an anti-climax? It was surprising and it was very depressing and well written, but i dunno, it just didn't seem to fit that well. The pregnancy seemed so rushed through and it was like they spent the whole of their time simply trying to get together that i was expecting it to be a little more lengthy as far as their relationship was concerned. I did notice toward the last several chapters everything seemed to be getting more and more dark in the storyline, like a 180 in it's mood, which wasn't bad, i like the darker stuff. Overall, you did an awesome job with twists and surprises and the style of writing was fantastic, you are a great author! Thank you for sharing this.
| Reviewed By: nightshade41230 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 04, 2008 05:20 CST
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i loved the story,ay least he had a chance in the end,some people don't even get the chance,I hope to read another great story by you very soo,(a happy one) I hate crying.I even cry at cartoons lol
| Reviewed By: Kagome360 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 03, 2008 22:43 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
So, I'm not sure if you go to a tattoo shop very often, but most tattoo shops open late in the evening unless they have a customer who is special enough for an appointment during the day. Also, with my experience, paper towels aren't the best to wrap a tattoo in after it's finished; they breathe too much, technically a fresh tattoo is like an open wound, you want to close it off from open air bacteria, Syrian wrap is better, it's close to the skin and allows other people to admire the work. And, 45 minutes is an okay amount of time to wait before cleaning the fresh tattoo, but an hour is best to be safe. I am, however, glad that you know about A&D ointment, don't you just love the smell? Sterilizing the equipment, pretty much everything from the needles to the steel drum thing (the name escapes me) come in pre-packaged, sterile bags, just like the needles. It's good to get payment first, as well as all the information about the client, any allergies, if they are the legal age in that area to get a tattoo, and a photo ID. After care, A&D ointment, I've personally never used it for the after care of a tattoo, I have used Aquphore, it seems to work better for women then men though. I've spoken to a lot of men who tried Aquphore and it completely fucked up their tattoos, but I've been using it since my second one and it works a lot better than lotion. Though I'm sure A&D ointment is almost the exact same stuff as Aquphore, it just comes in a tube where Aquphore comes in a jar. I just kinda kept note of the shop and everything, I help out at one and have a number of large tattoos so I kinda keyed in on that. Your story was very good, I personally liked the first ending a lot better, it was more thought out than the throne together one you posted to make some angry reviews happy again (or to stop badgering you). You, as the author, have all say in the endings, I actually thought just before the truck hit 'It would suck super hardcore like if an accident happened, she wouldn't put them through that just after the whole killing people thing, would she?' And you did. On the tattoo stuff up there, I'm not the absolute authority on anything. If you go to a tattoo shop and that's how they run things then it's their shop. This is by far the longest review I have ever written. This was a very enjoyable story, kept me hooked til the end. I just have my idea of tattoo shops and all that jazz, as I'm sure you have yours. Wonderful job!
| Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: December 02, 2008 20:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
that last chapter was very cute!!! the other one was so sad!!!
| Reviewed By: FluffyLady [MediaMiner Member] On: November 16, 2008 12:23 CST
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I didn't know you were on here, too! lol. I love this story, no matter the site.
| Reviewed By: nightshade41230 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 10, 2008 00:36 CST
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Loved the chapter.This story has a very good plot and I enjoyed it very much can't wait to read more and to see if the baby is gonna be full demon..
| Reviewed By: nightshade41230 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 30, 2008 00:03 CDT
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I loved this story very much,I hope nothing happens to kagome and her pup and her love sesshomaru..I can't wait to read more of this..You are very talented and I love the story gosh its so good
| Reviewed By: funnyduckie1 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 25, 2008 16:27 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG! This fic is awesome! Plz update soon!! I want 2 see wats gonna happen
| Reviewed By: Mysterious_Tears [MediaMiner Member] On: September 21, 2008 02:25 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love your story! It's the perfect Sess/Kags story, only with some twist I've never seen before! It's great! Please update soon ! Can't wait! ~Ja Ne~ Mysterious_Tears
| Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: September 05, 2008 08:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
what I find so funny is that 99% of Youki pregnancies in the fan fiction world go by VERY quickly, quicker than a normal human pregnancy... which is funny because Youki live longer than humans and animals that live longer than then to have longer gestation periods... (like an Elephant... 12 months... ) and animals which have shorter live have shorter gestation periods... I think it also has some thing to do with he body mass of the animal as well....
| Reviewed By: Puzzled_91 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 20, 2008 14:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This storyline is so original, and easily followed, As well, it is filled with anticipation for the fics heroes. Read this fic or keep reading, and (to the author)keep writing I really want to know what will happen next.
| Title: youkailover1
Reviewed By: youkailover1 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 17, 2008 20:30 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay I loved this story so far! Its so great that you've breached the gap between feudal and modern times and what happened to everyone since then. Its also great that you included some very funny scenes in here like the almost falling into the koi pond. :) I can't wait to see if they have a little baby Sess or Kags and I'm hoping you rub it into that cousin's face! And maybe alittle remembering how Sesshomaru of the Western Lands used to kick ass with the whip and poison claws would be cool too! I can't wait for more chapters!!!
| Reviewed By: nightshade41230 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 06, 2008 06:42 CDT
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I love your story I enjoyed it very much I can't wait to read more on it,,I'm putting you in my favs thanks for a good story..
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