| "Comprehendible nonsense in illuminating twilight." Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] |
Reviewed By: Snowfall [MediaMiner Member] On: October 28, 2011 02:13 EDT
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I challenge you to finish this with 50,000 words during nanowrimo, even if it means a rewrite! ^_^ Heheheheh. |
Reviewed By: loretta537 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2008 03:16 EDT
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please update this soon
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Reviewed By: loretta537 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2008 16:44 EDT
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this is a great story, i hope that they get to go explain to their friends what's going on and i cant wait to see what happens in that messed up family of theirs.
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Reviewed By: milenalupin [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2008 08:46 EDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very creative layout of the story. I think you've captured me there. (^_^) The original characters are interesting, so far. I especially like Kokoro. Not quite sure about Yume, though - she seem too willful and interfering to be a supporting character. Beware of making her a Mary Sue! But, of course, since I've only seen a few moments of her, it's not fair to judge now. I'll wait patiently what you're going to do with her. One point of criticism I do need to mention, though. Please mind the spelling of canon character names. The young bat hanyou is really called Shiori. Inuyasha's Dad's title is "inu no taisho" (or taishou) - not Taishio. And the old village miko's name is Kaede (Japanese for maple). While I admit it's a pet peeve of mine, I do think I'm not the only one who gets annoyed about the creative name spelling...
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Reviewed By: loretta537 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2008 05:58 EDT
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This is great!! i think this will be a wonderful story if you keep up the good work. can we have a chapter or more a week?
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Reviewed By: Cat Happy [MediaMiner Member] On: June 16, 2008 15:45 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please more more more that was so cute i loved it please up date soon i want to know what happens :)
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