| "Time Well Spent" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] |
Title: Hi again xD
Reviewed By: Eiko007 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2010 19:29 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Reading you're fic one more time xD jijiji OMG this phrase killed me "He should have said thank you for all the ramen she'd made him." i just got this image of poor Inu with his ears slightly down with puppy eyes looking at Kagome... xD I just LOVED that line xD
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Reviewed By: nsi On: August 14, 2008 20:53 CDT
Comment/Review:
The one shot has promise. That is about as much as I can get you. I am confused as to why you feel the need to bold everything. Do you speak like that? As if you are bolding every other word? Not only is it distracting but it is making it look like you just want to say 'look at me swear, look at me say the f-word'. It severely reduces the quality of this story, and even more so, the enjoyment factor. That, combined with the cliches you throw in there is enough to turn me off your fiction completely. I am sure you are a very nice person, but the quality is just terrible. Your grammar, spelling and story structure is there. You can clearly write. There are just a few things in the way of you becoming a truly great writer. Work on format, and focus on being original, not cliche, and you might just get there.
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Title: AMAZING
Reviewed By: Desgardia [MediaMiner Member] On: July 26, 2008 00:15 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ok um did u have 1 of the writers from the show help you out or are you just that good omg this was amazing i could see every thing in my head it was like watching an actual episode i am sending this to alota my freinds man thi just blew me away i hope to read more from you this was an amazing fac fic i have no complaits other than a sequal but even thats not a complaint thats jst an exicted reader wanting more
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Reviewed By: Drake Clawfang [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2008 21:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
An good one-shot, nice lemon and a nice twist on what Inuyasha does alone when everyone assumes he's run off to Kikyo.
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Reviewed By: Mabbline991220 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 30, 2008 22:47 CDT
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This story is very nicely wrtten and overall very cute. Too bad the seies can'tend somewhat like this.
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Reviewed By: LiHudson [MediaMiner Member] On: June 30, 2008 14:15 CDT
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Beautiful, beautiful job. It's been a long time since I've encountered a new, well-written one-shot where they've gotten together! I thoroughly enjoyed it! Well done!
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Reviewed By: Alaskan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 30, 2008 03:02 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I just want to say this fic is very good! The last line made me actually lol, which is pretty rare. If I had a hanyou to screw with all day I'd fuck school too, LOL. At any rate, I saw nearly no mistakes except one word that I think should have been 'she' was 'he'. I loved your idea, and the way Inuyasha endured all those osuwaris haha. Great fic! *wants to see more*
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Reviewed By: loretta537 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2008 21:54 CDT
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this was a great story, now how does everybody else react?
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