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Reviewed By: J Luc Pitard [MediaMiner Member] On: June 01, 2009 17:31 CDT
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The sex was passionate, I'll give you that! No real complaints, but your exposition style is a bit clumsy. The story picked up with Tetsu and Minoru waking him. I'm surprised you didn't play up her attempts to make things "perfect" and force him to grab her for their reunion kiss. I don't mind that they're both amazingly experienced for two virgins since between their imagination and the internet, they may very well have some plans for each other. Still, she seems a bit bumbling in the romance department. Overall I think you write passion well.

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