Title: Has Promise
Reviewed By: PynkPlayar [MediaMiner Member] On: August 05, 2009 19:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
You have promise as a writer, but you need to clean up your story a lot. A really important thing to do is reread and edit --you have a few noticeable spelling and grammatical mistakes that, if you simply skimmed over, could be fixed with ease. The story is pretty common, but you can make it your own by expanding on your ideas. "She was pretty." Why was she pretty? Was it in the grace of her movements or in the pink of her face? Anyways, keep writing!! I'm sure you'll improve!
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