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| "Love me..." Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: waterslave1 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 03, 2009 14:39 CDT
Comment/Review:
It's really hard to read the story when there are no paragraph breaks. I coulden't even make it halfway through the story before I lost my patience and stoped. i'm sure the actual story is great, but you need to reformat it.
| Reviewed By: nekoluver666 On: October 09, 2008 21:55 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved your story. It was a joy to read. However, I didn't like how you described Riku wrong. His eyes are not gold. They were when he looked like Ansem, but that's because Ansem's eyes are gold. After reading that I almost stopped reading your fic immediately, but I decided to finish it anyway. Next time either use the correct eye color of the character or let the readers know you using the eye color the character had that wasn't their natural color. >.< Does that even make sense?
| Reviewed By: K.Usagi On: September 16, 2008 14:29 CDT
Comment/Review:
I don't know if this happened when you put it online or what; However, you need to go back through and make paragraphs. alot of them. The plot sound good, but in its current format it is too much of an eyesore to try reading.
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