Reviewed By: Sweetened Bitters On: April 25, 2015 23:24 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
How did Goku get back inside the ship when Trunks had it
weaponized? If it was booby-trapped, then goku would have gotten
zapped or he would have come back and probably interrupted Pan and
Trunks. Thank you for making Trunks and attentive lover. There's
nothing hotter in porn (or in RL, for that matter!) than a partner
who gives a shit about their partner's needs. Using words like
'lovingly' made my heart melt. I wish you would have expounded on
this sort of description as its instances were always far too
brief. You have a lovely, descriptive poetry going on that I
applaud you on. You might not enjoy writing dbz anymore, but might
I suggest, if you ever do write again, to try your hand at Bardock,
Broly, or Turles? I would PAY good money to read something with
Turles heh
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