| "My New Undead Life" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: tristar49 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 10, 2009 21:33 CDT
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this is good keep up the excellent work
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Reviewed By: tristar49 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 30, 2009 00:09 CDT
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that is a good story, keep up with the great work and update soon.
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Reviewed By: ruthlessculprit [MediaMiner Member] On: March 12, 2009 00:54 CDT
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interesting.
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Title: A little friendly advice
Reviewed By: AngelsRebellion(logged out) On: August 29, 2008 22:17 CDT
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Since this is your first fanfic I'm going to be kind and give you a little advice. Anyone above the age of 13 is going to take one look at this and move on. Not because it isn't good, but because of the layout. Everything is too bunched together. You need to seperate the paragraphs and seperate the dialogue from the paragraphs so that it's not all lopped together. It makes the reading flow, making it easier for people to read and to make the over all layout of the chapter look clean and neat. I hope I'm not coming off as mean or flaming because that's seriously not my intention. So I'm going to favorite this story and after/if you clean it up I would love to come back and read it^^
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