| "If You Are Not The One" Reviews/Comments [ 23 ] |
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Reviewed By: rainydays [MediaMiner Member] On: September 09, 2008 01:37 CDT
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Oh... and so it begins. What a horrid man... I hope that Kagome is able to find a way out of this. I have a feeling the climax might occur at the ball...? Hmph. It's just so aggravating... they are almost together! AH! Also.. I wonder how Miroku and Sango are doing on their romantic rendezvous. Hah. I can't wait to read more! Excellent Job!
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Reviewed By: Inuyasha Baby_bre [MediaMiner Member] On: September 08, 2008 16:56 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
awwww man i'm pulling my hair out here. this is so suspenseful.
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Reviewed By: kokoronagomu [MediaMiner Member] On: September 07, 2008 21:53 CDT
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this is a really good story! it has all the elements to make it a great story, the only problem is that you need to watch the malapropisms (words that sound similar but are not the ones you want, examples: 'fallow' is what farmers do with their fields, you mean 'follow'. 'stresses' is what gives people heart attacks, you mean 'tresses'. a 'lab' is where a scientist works, you mean 'lap'. etc.) spell check doesn't catch them as they are real words, just the wrong words. i suggest to the authors i beta for to download a dictionary. i use a free one i got from~ wordweb . info ~and all i have to do is highlight a word and click the icon on the toolbar. ♦ when you're reading a really good story only to come to a sudden jarring stop at a misused word. i would suggest getting a beta reader (i would offer but i don't do lemons), there are a few fan fiction sites that have a list of beta readers and livejournal has a couple beta reading communities. ♥ like i said, your story is really good but it has the potential to be great! ♥ thank you, ginny
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Reviewed By: Genie666 On: September 07, 2008 11:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm LOVING this story!!! What I really appreciate from this story is that you didn't rush the relationship between Inuyasha and Kagome which made it believable for me and you can see the slow progression between the two. Plz keep writing and I'm anxiously waiting for the next chapter =)
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Reviewed By: rainydays [MediaMiner Member] On: September 07, 2008 03:08 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really enjoyed your story! I am wondering how Inuyasha will act when he finds out her true identity... I hope you update soon :o)
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Reviewed By: Tarzan14 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 06, 2008 14:03 CDT
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whoa is kagome pregnant? that was messed up for souta to be willing to give out his sister's number to the dude who broke her heart. can't wait for the next chapter
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Reviewed By: Katya Izmir [MediaMiner Member] On: September 06, 2008 01:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story ROCKS!!! I really love it, it's been awhile since I've read a really good inu/kag fic... for some reason ppl keep putting sess and kag together O.o Keep up the good work Can't wait for the next instalment! ~Katya
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Reviewed By: OLDDOG333 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 05, 2008 23:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'M SORRY DID I MISS SOMETHING???? HOW DID KAGOME GET TO CLUB TOXIC WITH BANKOTSU???? HOW DID YASHA AN SOUTA GET THERE TOGETHER???? AND WHY IS KAGOME DRAGGING BANKOTSU TO A VIP ROOM TO GET LUCKY???? I FEEL LIKE I MISSED A CHAPTER OR SOMPHING DID THEY HAVE ANOTHER FIGHT????WHAT GIVES???? I AM A REALLY CONFUSED DOLDDOG333 KEEPER OF THE DEMON HOUNDS "HELP PLEASE"
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Reviewed By: Inuyasha Baby_bre [MediaMiner Member] On: September 05, 2008 17:54 CDT
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yo that was hot.
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Reviewed By: Ichigohime [MediaMiner Member] On: September 05, 2008 08:02 CDT
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AH! And it just gets better and better. I liked Sesshourmaru's charcter in the story. XD AH!! Update soon!
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Title: Kick`Ass story
Reviewed By: Inuyasha Baby_bre [MediaMiner Member] On: September 04, 2008 20:08 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
yo oh my god that was fucking off da chain.....What the fuck is kagome pregnant with Inuyasha's baby. And what about souta. i hope kouga doesn't come back, and please let kagome speal the beans to inuyasha about her real identity. plz update soon
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Reviewed By: kirarakat55 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 03, 2008 15:13 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
What a wonderful story! So far I have loved every minute of it. I can feel the love/hate thing you have going on with Kagome and Inuyasha, it makes them so real. I love the drama and the chemistry between them all. I hope now that Souta threw himself into the mix he can con Kagome into coming clean with her identity, before Bankotsu does it for her. Please update soon!
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Reviewed By: Lian55 On: August 30, 2008 04:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
The story is pretty interesting but there's a thing that's not credible and I found it completely unnecessary. Kagome changing her name. You do realise she would need some sort of identification to actually get a job? And that ID would have her real name on it. And she isn't a convict on the run or anything. Why would she need to change her name?
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Reviewed By: Ichigohime [MediaMiner Member] On: August 27, 2008 20:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
YO. I have to say I did enjoy reading your story. It was pretty good. It's very creative. Some spelling errors but other than that, nothing too big. Update soon! I can't wait to read more. Don't make me wait too long. XDD
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Title: I like it
Reviewed By: fasttimeport [MediaMiner Member] On: August 26, 2008 19:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really enjoyed reading this story. Hope you updated very soon.
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