| "It started with a kiss" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] |
Reviewed By: fdxfdgd On: August 30, 2008 23:07 CDT
Comment/Review:
love it
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Reviewed By: IluvInuFanFics [MediaMiner Member] On: August 30, 2008 18:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 2 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
I agree with the first three reviewers. Also to me, you should try flowing a little bit more. Your flow of the story is why to spoken up. Got a great plot going on, but you need a flow. I also love when Inu is calling Sess, fluffy. Thats was a great.
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Reviewed By: Lynzi18 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 30, 2008 10:33 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
awww...the beginning is soo cute!!!PLease continue!!!!
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Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: August 30, 2008 05:30 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
awww... very cute!
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Reviewed By: sexxiigurrll0204 [not signed in] On: August 29, 2008 15:02 CDT
Comment/Review:
i think it has a good plot, however, i agree with the other two reviewers. try not to make it all one paragraph, and then it'll be a lot better =]
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Reviewed By: Miss Nikki [MediaMiner Member] On: August 29, 2008 14:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 3 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think you have a lot of work on your hands. You're story is a block of text. You would benefit from a beta. I'm sure you can find one on the forums of this site or any site devoted to InuYasha. Though it may take some time to find a good, reliable one. In the mean time this site should help.http://inuyasha.nu/forums/index.php?showtopic=1499 Nikki MisstressNicole@hotmail.com
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Title: first review on this website YAY
Reviewed By: sandalswithsox [MediaMiner Member] On: August 29, 2008 09:20 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi this is my first review on this website so if it doesnt do what its supposed to im sorry. anyway um do you know that you aren't putting any paragraphs between dialogue? i know thats kinda picky but its just one of those things that makes fanfictions harder to read because i can't figure out who is saying what and what's happening. Your story was all one paragraph and i kinda had to squint a little to figure out who said what.
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