| "Emotional Mix up" Reviews/Comments [ 12 ] |
Reviewed By: Zofo [MediaMiner Member] On: January 11, 2009 17:28 CST
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Are you sure Goku's not possessed or having a mental breakdown? He seems to flit from one personality to another and have suicide tendencies. Bit shocked at Vegeta's dismissal of him killing Bulma, that was more like old evil Vegeta. Perhaps it's catching!
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Reviewed By: Zofo [MediaMiner Member] On: December 17, 2008 18:02 CST
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Oh that was very dark. I didn't know Goku had it in him to do something like that! Vegeta is suspicious though.
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Reviewed By: Zofo [MediaMiner Member] On: December 13, 2008 22:14 CST
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Gosh Goku must be possessed or something to do it a second time. I wouldn't blame Vegeta if he never went near Goku again. However, I love this couple so hope they find a way.
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Reviewed By: Zofo [MediaMiner Member] On: November 25, 2008 19:54 CST
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What on earth is wrong with Goku? Has he lost his mind? He was so out of character in doing that to Vegeta. And why didn't Vegeta take the baby with him? He's just given birth to it. Shouldn't he have maternal instincts to look after it and feed it? This chapter throw up so many questions. Hope you feel better soon.
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Reviewed By: Zofo [MediaMiner Member] On: November 19, 2008 20:42 CST
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Wow that was unexpected. Did Vegeta know he was pregnant because as Goku said, he wasn't showing? Must be a Saiyan thing. Least there's no chance he will go back to Bulma now :) How's the fan art going?
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Reviewed By: Zofo [MediaMiner Member] On: November 14, 2008 20:41 CST
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How dare Bulma try to make it up with Vegeta! Glad he told her some home truths. Chichi seems remarkably reasonable, makes me feel uneasy. Oh no, what has Goku seen Vegeta doing? Suspense is killing me! Let me know where you post the fan art if you do any as I'd love to see it :)
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Reviewed By: Zofo [MediaMiner Member] On: October 31, 2008 20:24 CDT
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Oh just when they were getting into it Bulma shows up and spoils it. Vegeta better stand by Goku and reject her (shakes fist at Bulma). Sorry your beta let you down. This chapter was better at grammar though. The more you write, the better it will get :)
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Reviewed By: Zofo [MediaMiner Member] On: October 30, 2008 18:24 CDT
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Gosh that was unlike Goku to do that to Bulma, he must have really saw red. Still, now he has told Vegeta and it looks like Vegeta feels the same. Hope it's not just a one-off though as that would break poor Goku's heart :(
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Reviewed By: Zofo [MediaMiner Member] On: October 16, 2008 18:39 CDT
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Vegeta and Bulma made up! Poor Goku, he must be so gutted :( Hope he gets his prince away from her soon. You asked your English teacher to beta? Hope that doesn't get you in trouble due to the subject matter!
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Reviewed By: Zofo [MediaMiner Member] On: October 10, 2008 19:45 CDT
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You could get someone to beta your stories to correct the spelling and grammar, having said that, this chapter was ok in that regard. Goku needs to go after Vegeta as he seems in denial about Bulma.
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Reviewed By: Zofo [MediaMiner Member] On: October 07, 2008 16:22 CDT
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Plus points - a longer chapter with more depth. Minus points - the spelling and grammar are really bad, hard to work out at times :(
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Reviewed By: Zofo [MediaMiner Member] On: September 27, 2008 23:22 CDT
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Very, very confusing story.
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