Title: Good job!
Reviewed By: GohanXGoten_For_Life [MediaMiner Member] On: August 09, 2010 11:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really liked you'r story and i hope you continue! I gave you a 7 in style of writing cause the last part of the story about everyone getting scars and bulma and Chi-Chi died wasn't really my taste. It was good but it trailed from Goten,Adam,Josh and Trunks being gay to stabbings and death and scars out of nowhere? Well just clean up and put in a Storyline and who and why is doing the scars and stabbings and you will be a great writer. Good luck!
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