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| "Heart Ties" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Reviewed By: Evelyn Rose On: July 29, 2010 02:42 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Bummer! It was so good but I am finding my self wanting what I can't have. MORE! Well at least I can't have more now, and I am the sort of gal who is into instant-gratification! [I only read completed stories] But I made a exception here, I hope to see more! Now for guessing at the plot [as I always do] I am speculating that the 'other man' is either Ronald or Blaize, no? haha it dosn't matter at this point! I'm just excited for more! The way you have written this in such detail, its eloquent really. Really professional. And the cliff-hanger just kills the audience with suspense! One thing you could work on is describing the characters emotions in more depth, to help the reader relate better, we know what Draco and Hermione are feeling, but you have not forced us to feel it too, you know? Make your readers FEEL what your characters are feeling and you will get many more tears, laughs, shouts of rage, from your readers as they are drawn into the story on a personal level. Well, that's all I have to say! Good luck writing! and I can assure you your readers love what you write!!! Happy writing! Evelyn Rose
| Reviewed By: NakedFlowers [MediaMiner Member] On: October 25, 2008 18:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow. I'm a little anxious about who the other "he" is since I'd hate for a good character's rep to be ruined, but I really like what this story promises to be. Obviously, Malfoy is way out of character, I'm looking forward to finding out why and hopefully how he and Hermoine were together at all in later chapters. My only complaint is that you only have the one chapter so far. I've favortied this story and am anxiously waiting for the next chapter. On the matter of a what the child should be... I'd say pick which ever one you can come up with a wider selection of issues/problems/moments for.
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