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| "Story Number Ten" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: Psycho_Z [MediaMiner Member] On: December 03, 2008 09:33 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your prose is a little thick in this one. I was confused as to what was happening during the elevator section and towards the end. All the technical stuff about the Geofront was confusing and sort of dull. It was nice to hear from Kensuke, get a little humor into the proceedings, and I liked actually seeing some zombie action. (If I'm permitted to use the "z" word.) The interaction between Shinji and Rei is as good as always. I'd like to see how this ends but if you're not feeling it that much, maybe stopping for now is for the best. The writting was a little sloppy this time around.
| Reviewed By: Psycho_Z [MediaMiner Member] On: November 03, 2008 09:02 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Its a testament to your skills as a writer that in the middle section, I really wasn't sure if there were any zombies or if the whole thing was just a ploy. And can I use that word, zombie? Or is this going to take another surprising twist before its over? Rei sure did talk a lot, a lot more then I'd expect of her. You seem to be pushing her character a bit with the exposition and the kung-fu fighting. Just a bit. Also, they were some typos at the end. The potato chips part made me laugh. The humor was needed. Good chapter, over all. I'd like to see how this one developes.
| Reviewed By: Psycho_Z [MediaMiner Member] On: October 25, 2008 19:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another series all ready? It's certainly off to an interesting start. Asuka was going to... Eat him? I see you have parred down your writing some. It's much smoother, tighter. At the same time, I sort of miss some of the flippant expressions. Why was this rated X?
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