Reviewed By: King Baka [MediaMiner Member] On: December 19, 2008 21:01 CST
Comment/Review:
A nice little story, and very good for your first fanfiction. I liked how you portrayed Inuyasha's past, and how he differentiated between Kagome and Kikyou. A couple things I would have done differently: (1) Kagome wouldn't have called Inuyasha a 'bastard.' I don't know if she's ever swore in her life. (2) I think you could make do with fewer 'Sits.' But then again, I hate the rosary for a variety of reasons, and I use it in my stories only where it truly is justified. But anyway, I enjoyed this story regardless, and I'll be sure to check out the rest of your work.
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