Reviewed By: wbk [MediaMiner Member] On: November 21, 2008 01:37 CST
Comment/Review:
i like the premise of this story. i like the style of you writing. it's easy to follow. there were a few amall errors--such as referring to kaede as kikyou, and using feat in place of feet--but they didn't detract from the story. some parts could have been developed further to make the story feel more complete. the unquestioning acceptance of a human inuyasha by those who've never seen him in that state before, the way that naraku just left, instead of gloating over his victory and i think the most impostant would be inuyasha's lack of emotional pain at seeing kikyou under naraku's control being the three that stand out strongest in my mind. overall, it is a good start, and i will continue to anticipate your posts.
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