| "To Be Free" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] |
Title: I'M ALREADY HOOKED!!!!!
Reviewed By: LavonyaVegeta lover [MediaMiner Member] On: March 29, 2012 14:14 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is fantastic!!!! i love this!!!!! I hope she doesn't get sold but maybe escape! i just had a brilliant idea but this is only a suggestion; how about she is made a scientist and then she ecapes and she is a fugitive wanted by the saiyans and frieza for her inventions? its an idea but hey i don't write so if it sound bad to you just diregard what i said. |
Title: Good writing
Reviewed By: FieryPen37 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 26, 2008 23:26 EST
Comment/Review:
First off, excellent hook. I was immediately drawn into her pain and her struggle. The descriptions were good and the idea solid. But the format was a little distracting and the transitions were a bit abrupt, but without those minor problems it was a good chapter. Can't wait for more!
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Title: AWESOME!!
Reviewed By: Tiffy On: November 06, 2008 21:14 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your first chapt is amazing! I'm already hooked! I cant wait for more! >_
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