Reviewed By: kokoronagomu [MediaMiner Member] On: December 01, 2008 12:08 CST
Comment/Review:
you have potential. one of the biggest things you can do for your story and your readers would be to put line breaks between your paragraphs so it will be easier to read. ♣ another would be to make sure that if you are writing with bouncing perspectives is not to repeat the same scene over and over again. it would be better to use the third person narrative and describe a scene once, that way you avoid being redundant. ♠ when people speak use quotation marks [" "} instead of the apostrophe marks [' '] it will be easier to identify a spoken statement. ♦ when writing formally as in a story, letter, etc. use capitalization. i understand that i forgo the use of capitalization when i write reviews but when i write an editorial for my newsletter, when i write a business letter or when i write a story i conscientiously capitalize. ♥ as i said, you have potential so don't give up on your writing. we all strive to improve and practice only makes perfect. one will be looking forward to watching your improvement. thank you.
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