| "No more, Please" Reviews/Comments [ 12 ] |
Reviewed By: sessyalltheway [MediaMiner Member] On: August 03, 2009 21:09 CDT
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lol no problem! and its not like there was anything to really edit! lol what? one or two sentences? i should thank you for letting me read your work!!! thank you and continue the splendor!!!!
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Reviewed By: Inumimi [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2009 16:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story and well written,I hope you update soon! I am also so glad that you warn us about any historical liberties you are taking, I think it's fine to do so as long as you give us a heads up that you are taking literary license (I just had to point out to an author that Kagome could not get corn in the 1500's in Japan,it is a new world food and it is still very hard to get fresh corn even today)so I really appreciate your research!
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Reviewed By: sessyalltheway [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2009 23:26 CDT
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hey if you confuse people maybe they will look it up and actually learn something!!!! that might cut down on the amount of uneducated people out there, which would be a great thing!!!!
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Reviewed By: sessyalltheway [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2009 23:23 CDT
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you HAVE to update!!! i absolutely LOVE this story!!!!! its great!!!! i ahave read it all just now!!!!
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Reviewed By: Elven_mistress [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2009 21:13 CDT
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yay! i have found an equal!!!!!! I do read the dictionary when I'm bored ^_^!!!!!! It's fun to confuse friends with big words they don't know, lol. I probably would've used the big fancy word instead of "piano" but I was worried I'd confuse people. lol. no offence meant to the easy-to-confuse ones.
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Reviewed By: sessyalltheway [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2009 20:57 CDT
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the reason i said harppsicord instead of piano is because its older...closer to the time frame...and im a dork right along with you! i love wikipedia and the dictionary...lol im probably MUCH more of a dork than you!!! you probably dont read the dictionary for fun or when your bored do you??? so there someone is worse than you....be happy! lol
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Reviewed By: sessyalltheway [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2009 20:29 CDT
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let me guess Sesshy is playing a harpsicord? and giant shrimp, little giants, wow im usually the one who has to explain what that is...YAY i not the only one who knows!!! oh and i am loving the story so far!!!
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Reviewed By: GhostReader [MediaMiner Member] On: June 03, 2009 20:04 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like this story, keep updating! I want kagome to purify what's his name to.
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Reviewed By: KJ On: January 05, 2009 00:31 CST
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I enjoy getting to see more into Hikari's past. I wonder what changed her father so much though...does it have something to do with her brother I wonder... or maybe her mother's death? Maybe both? Her dad trying to pimp her out (for lack of a better term) was certainly appalling. You make him really easy to dislike. I am eager to see if you shape him purely as a villain or if you are going to use the "Yes he is a bad guy but there is a reason that he is the way he is" approach. Both have their place in a good story... I think at this point you are doing a good job of showing the growth of Rin and Hikari's relationship, but I think you need to work on Hikari and Sesshoumaru's. We see them thrown together, but no real "growing together" dialogue...both are still very surface level and we need to see more than that (as well as a reason for that growth aka Why are they willing to share more). You have started that process, but need to expand on it. I enjoy getting to see this shaping into an interesting piece. Keep up the good work! By the way impressive update rate...I am more used to having to wait months rather than days for an update! Superb!
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Reviewed By: funnyduckie1 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 04, 2009 09:30 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great fic! Just can u make the chapters longer.. i want 2 read more!!! LOL.. great plot!
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Reviewed By: Elven_mistress [MediaMiner Member] On: January 03, 2009 19:38 CST
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Well thankyou, I hope I live up to your expectations.
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Reviewed By: KJ On: January 03, 2009 00:57 CST
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An interesting approach. I am eager to hear how Sesshoumaru has changed his opinion on those of mixed parentage. Your style of writing is fast paced enough to keep the reader interested and you do a nice job of letting us see into a character's head without giving it all alway. I also like how you have already planted seeds for future chapters--like the hint about her previous suitors. I am eager to see where you take this.
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