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| "Regret" Reviews/Comments [ 25 ] | | Pages (2): [ « ‹ 1 2 ] | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: January 12, 2009 15:43 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Don't hate the plot bunnies! They're there for a reason. I don't think you have to worry about this blowing up into a full-fledged story, although at the same time I will probably agree that one more chapter alone might not cut it. I'm sensing probably the next chapter will eventually get us to the *beginning* of the 'making-up' stuff, to be continued and concluded near the end of the chapter after next. Now, *how* you go about pulling that off is what will make it entertainment! Will Kagome's old feelings for him gradually start gnawing at the back of her mind? Will she somehow be made aware of what *really* happened, and *why* he had agreed to leave with Kikyou in the first place? If Kagome knew that Inuyasha had been hoping all along that the two of them would be together again, that his soul and Kikyou's soul would be together in Kagome and his supposed reincarnation, then she would realize that he never meant to abandon her. Yes, he's an idiot, but he's *her* idiot...
| Reviewed By: Lunabell [MediaMiner Member] On: January 12, 2009 02:03 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yeah! You tell him kagome! Lol! I still want them to be togather again. Inuyasha is going to have to work VERY hard to get kagome's trust back.
| Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: January 12, 2009 01:23 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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great update... so they finally met... not a good confrontation though... lot of drama unfolding in the latest chapter... wonder what inuyasha will do now... what will kagome do... what's next... update when you can... please and thank you...
| Reviewed By: sakuralovesinuyasha [MediaMiner Member] On: January 12, 2009 00:34 EST
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Kudos to your plot bunnies. I shall build them a shrine and heap praises upon them!! I love this story...I just hope that eventually there will be a happily ever after. Kagome seems pretty angry so that may not be in the cards. You have done an excellent job. You hooked me with the first chapter. I shall eagerly await the next.
| Reviewed By: psyco_chick32 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 11, 2009 21:08 EST
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Wooooooow. The nerve of him! "Don't take it for granted." O.o I can imagine how angry Kagome is... That being said, I may die of angst if this grows into a full-on story... *angstangstangst* Well, if that didn't prove to InuYasha that she's not happy, I don't know what will. I think he was perfectly in character, and Kagome's really damn jaded now... now I'm wondering how he'll be able to fix it, or if Kagome will cave first, like in the original one-shot.
| Reviewed By: TheycallmeAL...really?...no On: January 07, 2009 16:32 EST
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This is an awesome story I can't wait to read more.
| Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: January 06, 2009 23:33 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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great update... seems to be like a prequel to akihana's abandonment - which was a good story also... but this is starting to be very different... wonder what happens when inuyasha & kagome finally meet... hope it'll be different from the other story and still have a happy ending?... update when you can... please and thank you...
| Reviewed By: scherezade [MediaMiner Member] On: January 06, 2009 19:22 EST
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Hey there! Glad I could help you find "Abandonment" again! And thanks for your kind words in your intro. I'm *so* glad you updated! I was really curious to see how this chapter was going to play out. It differs from "Abandonment" in that your fic, Inuyasha's motivation to go with Kikyo is to give Kagome her happy future with a reincarnation, rather than just focusing purely on Inu's own desires to be with Kikyo. I can believe this reason because it seems that as selfish as everyone likes to portray Inuyasha in various fanfics, he really in many ways is very selfless towards his companions. Even though it seemed a little strange to have Inu bearing his soul to a strange, bulbous creature...it is refreshing to have him open up. I am curious to see Kagome's reaction to his return. Even though I am a diehard and thorough Inu-Kag lover, when you have a set up like this, it just begs for Kagome *not* to play the doormat. She needs to stick up for her feelings and her sense of being abandoned... Don't make us wait too long!
| Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: January 06, 2009 19:14 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oooo...way different from Abandonment now! The entire reason he did what he did was so that, in the end, he'd be with Kagome again. So even though he was tricked, he never intentionally abandoned her at all! Really looking forward to seeing the way the rest of this story plays out. BTW, thank you for your kind words regarding my own stories. Mating Season took forever, but now that it's finally over, I plan on eventually making a continuation format sequel to Watching Her Sleep (if that's what you were referring to), and I will probably also be expanding Red Eyes, Warm Heart.
| Reviewed By: wbk [MediaMiner Member] On: January 06, 2009 18:44 EST
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i love the way that this story has begun. you have an easy writing style that is a pleasure to read. you have given great amounts of care and thought to your characters and plot. there are a few missing words, but not enough to really disrupt the flow. that's the curse of a quick mind. your typing fingers can never keep up with your thoughts. keep up the wonderful storyline, and i will be waiting for the next chapter.
| Reviewed By: Jessie Angel [MediaMiner Member] On: January 06, 2009 18:34 EST
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Really lovely piece of fiction here. I like that you are writing everything in first person POV. I always find it fascinating to see what the characters are thinking on the inside about a situation. I really loved this last chapter too.... (I'm dubbing it, the 'Purgatory Scene'), it's really nice to finally have InuYasha let everything out in the open. I mean, the guy just never does, and seeing him do it, with a complete stranger no less, is also a nice touch. Love your writing style too. Very Inuesque is a way, gruff and cocky in all the right places, and soft and gentle as well where it needs to be. Overall, I can't wait to see what the next chapter will reveal. Keep up the wonderful writing!
| Reviewed By: InuGoddess715 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 06, 2009 18:09 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is excellent. Your characterization is wonderful. I can't wait to see how Kagome reacts! Great job!
| Reviewed By: psyco_chick32 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 06, 2009 17:19 EST
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This is really well-written, but I'm anxious to see how you'll have Kagome act. I mean, there's little doubt she'll forgive him, but I can't help but wonder if you'll have her be somewhat cold to him... after all, whether he knew it or not, he left her alone, to fend for herself, and now Kaede is dead, too. He cares for her, but he's gruff... and I'm tempted to say Kagome's going to be a bit jaded about the whole scenario. After all, him coming back to her *after* going to Hell with Kikyou (well, that didn't happen, obviously, but the thought was there) is probably just going to cement the fact in her mind that she's always second to Kikyou. I'm very intrigued and cannot wait to read the end of this. Keep up the great work.
| Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: January 04, 2009 05:43 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
nice story... really liked it... sad for this part... looking forward to the other parts of this story... until next time... good work...
| Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: January 04, 2009 01:57 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've read the one-shot that inspired you to do this piece, although I also cannot recall the author off the top of my head. I will see if I can look it up. But at any rate, you are already original in that you are giving us more of a prequel to where that other story began, and you have other differences in that Kagome was gravely injured, and that Inuyasha encountered Miroku and Sango before her. Also, in the other one-shot, he was not lost in a daze unaware of the passage of time. He had not gone into Hell with Kikyou, but rather, he had merely wandered the woods with her in her false body until it eventually gave out. There are definitely enough differences to avoid any accusation of plagiarism, at least in my own opinion, although I cannot, and will not, speak for the author of the original one-shot. However, if it were me, as I have already had others write their own stories based upon my ideas in the past, I can tell you honestly that I would be flattered. I think what truly makes all the difference is that you acknowledge that you were inspired by another's fic, rather than pretending that these ideas were uniquely your own. That is no different from someone writing a fic based off of Beauty and the Beast, to name one of many examples. From a criticism stand point, I find that I really have none. It was well written, and I look forward to the other installments.
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