| "TABOO PARALLEL" Reviews/Comments [ 20 ] |
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Title: Badly written story
Reviewed By: Caius Julius On: August 12, 2015 22:31 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
I doubt very much that the Asuka liked being raped and accept to be
blackmailed when she would call the police and the Musashi, Mana
and Yui would arrested for sexual abuse. She would never have sex
with Musashi, she'd keep hatred for him
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Reviewed By: yo On: April 21, 2013 22:31 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i wish u would of put shinji/touji instead of these two clowns |
Reviewed By: ae On: March 10, 2013 19:06 PDT
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Nice, damn. What's left to do but put some of that drug in the school water supply and have everyone go at it? |
Reviewed By: bill0980 On: November 26, 2012 16:27 PST
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shorter chapters more frequent updates |
Reviewed By: steve1231 On: August 20, 2012 21:27 PDT
Comment/Review:
Yes to clit and urethra torture |
Reviewed By: Billsmoth On: June 27, 2012 22:16 PDT
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Wow that's intense. Maybe you can put some clit torture or maybe even urethra |
Reviewed By: suomynona On: April 08, 2011 05:44 PDT
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Yeah, the sex is hot and well written, and I'm not against humiliation & bondage etc... but honestly, the emotional torture gets a bit too extreme at times. Mostly because they want to deny everything else but being a slut from her, and even then they are only relentlessly threatening her all the time. Never giving her assurance that her masters/mistresses will look after her or actually care for her, and very rarely (it at all) complimenting her when she does "make progress". It gives a bit too cruel tone, imho. It's a pity because the sex scenes are written very hot and I do like the internal struggles too. ...It's just that her dominators could use a bit more "carrot" too, you know? Right now it feels like an endless tunnel of cruel darkness, ending up in a very nasty place even if her true nature IS a slut in this fic. |
Title: addicting
Reviewed By: Milton [MediaMiner Member] On: February 21, 2011 21:18 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i like the way you write, it gives so much imagery |
Reviewed By: Moton [MediaMiner Member] On: January 04, 2011 08:20 PST
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Stage 6 has some major formatting issues, I will wait until it has been updated to read it. |
Reviewed By: anima constrictor On: July 03, 2009 01:49 PDT
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You are amazing. simply put this quite possibly is the best fic i've read sex wise and story wise. i and a lot of readers have their own hopes how this story will turn but as of now im going to try to get rid of all hopes i have and just enjoy the fic in all of its awesome gruesomeness. i know a lot of people are expecting some sort of revenge to happen but i honestly can't see that happening anymore. i whole heartedly look forward to your next update with massive eagerness.
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Reviewed By: Genjoe On: June 24, 2009 08:23 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is one of the more in depth Lemons I've read. I like how it goes into alot of character development and doesn't just slap us with the cock. Also it seems there is a larger story going on beneath the surface. I'd like to see each of Asuka's tormentors get there which I'm sure they will. I also like how this has been a gradual process in her defilement. I get the feeling that dark clouds are forming over Mr.Ikari and this will lead to him letting his beast out of the cage. Also I'm kinda curious about where Gendo went. I know. Here I'm intrested about the story when I should be saying the sex is hot. Well it is. In the end the next chapter and the rest of the story are up to you. I'm just throwing my two cents in cause I know what its like to not get any feed back. Great work!
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Reviewed By: anima constrictor On: April 06, 2009 20:34 PDT
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OH MY GOD!!! such an amazing chapter! all throughout it you write really good lemon and at the end you leave it with such huge need to read the next chapter. I can't wait!
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Reviewed By: anima constrictor On: March 07, 2009 18:01 PST
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an impressive chapter. i really like you exposing the mind of musashi in this chapter and think you should continue doing so with the other characters, i would really be interested in rei's perspective. it also seems like you plan on connecting asuka and musashi together, while something i personally wouldn't prefer makes the fic even more interesting. happy writing!
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Reviewed By: Jmb23123 On: March 05, 2009 22:41 PST
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I actually think that in a darker story or side story from here: Asuka atempts suicide and lefts a diary about all this things. and Yui and the boys gets it. may be the whole suicide is not necesary but at least I want to se the part of Yui and those little b*stards geting it.
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Reviewed By: The Apt Question On: February 13, 2009 21:10 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I do hope there is justice for Asuka and Rei, sooner or later. I hate stories where the story ends with not only the rapists (and their accomplices) getting away with what they did, but continuing to do so, in perpetuity, because the story ends with the victim(s) still stuck in their plight.
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