| "A country boy, an a city girl." Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] |
Reviewed By: KittieCat [MediaMiner Member] On: January 26, 2009 14:30 CST
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I'm assuming you've seen Georgia Rule. It's rather close to that plot line. Careful with spelling and punctuation. It makes it harder to read and people are less likely to continue with the story if they have trouble reading.
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Reviewed By: animeangel47 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 25, 2009 18:47 CST
Comment/Review:
this is great please update soon
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Reviewed By: Jennyxoox [MediaMiner Member] On: January 24, 2009 19:52 CST
Comment/Review:
ah well its good to know ill work on spell check i did not know people look that much into a miss spelled word lol
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Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: January 24, 2009 18:41 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I recommend spell check... "ahwhere" "dose" "makon street"(Places, people have capital letters...) "i" (SAME with "I" which was written with a little letter way to many times...) great chapter.. little short... Good luck!!! oh I also noticed that you some times left out the 'g' at the end of some words like working, unless the word with a ' at the end making the g silent it would be considered a spelling mistake... (ie workin')
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Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: January 23, 2009 01:22 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh and finding your pulse takes too long and is very hard to get that CPR courses have taken it out because so many times you can mistake a living person with a pulse for a person with out a pulse.
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Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: January 23, 2009 01:19 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
perv... of course if he really wanted to check to see if she was still alive he could have just looked for if she was breathing... (unless he is a VERY stupid dumb country hick, or some city person who has never taken a CPR course (or medicine or nurse or the like)) because you always have a heart beat if you are breathing.... although dead bodies do tend to release gases... but I doubt that you would mistake that for breathing...
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Reviewed By: animeangel47 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 22, 2009 14:41 CST
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sorry about the last review my computer is messed up i ment to say that this is great i like this story and can't wait to see what happens next
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Reviewed By: animeangel47 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 22, 2009 14:40 CST
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this is great i like this story can't wait to what happens next
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