| "Oh My Gods!" Reviews/Comments [ 15 ] |
Reviewed By: sublimetrickster [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2009 11:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, you really hooked me on the first chapter, it was well written, funny, interesting and different. Chapter two wasn't as interesting, but it established Kagome and Inuyasha's relationship a little more. The third chapter, which is as far as I've made it at this point, was annoying because I ended up skipping a big chunck of it to get to what I was interested in. The whole first part feels unnecessary unless it's important later on that Kagome is afraid of spiders, and if it is important, then instead of Inuyasha randomly out of the blue saying there's a spider (which turns out not to be there at all), have Kagome see the spider and surprise Inuyasha by how scared she is of it, and then have him kill it. It just seemed so contrived so you could have her chase Inuyasha around. It was unnecessary. I'm not writing this to rip your story apart, I'm sorry if you take it that way, I just have really high hopes for this story, but that scene totally destroyed the seriousness Kagome feels for her current situation. Spelling - watch out for "alas" where you mean "at last". I'm gonna continue on with the rest of the chapters now, just had to get that off my chest. I know writing is hard work, I've done it, so keep up the good work.
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Reviewed By: Moonlit Showers [MediaMiner Member] On: March 16, 2009 21:42 CDT
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ooooh how creepy. And Inuyasha's possessiveness is really cute. I can't wait to see how shopping will turn out. Keep up the awesome work! ^_^
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Reviewed By: petpeeves123 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2009 15:06 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
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lol kag is finaly starting to have an interesting life. I bet rin purposely got up after kags fell asleep and made Inu go in there. I bet sess Don't need that much sleep
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Reviewed By: bk On: March 03, 2009 10:15 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I absolutely love your story. I cant wait for the next chapter. Keep up the good work.
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Reviewed By: Moonlit Showers [MediaMiner Member] On: March 02, 2009 22:44 CST
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hahaha poor Kagome caught in a compromising position. hehe and I love how all four of them are in the same apartment. Keep up the awesome work! ^_^
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Reviewed By: petpeeves123 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 17, 2009 16:13 CST
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mall. lol I bet Inu may not know much of the mortal realms history, technology and such, but he's probably really good at math, art, lore, and perhaps music.
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Reviewed By: petpeeves123 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 08, 2009 08:09 CST
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ooooook. Can't wait for next chappi
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Title: amazing
Reviewed By: mariposa_miko [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2009 21:30 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
amazing please update...keep writing...more more more....PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!! this was sooo fun to read and i want to know what happens!
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Reviewed By: Lunabell [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2009 02:33 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Lol! Her family are goofballs! So Kagomes moma DOES know Inuyasha and his mom. Great story by the way!
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Reviewed By: Moonlit Showers [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2009 00:27 CST
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hahaha Kagome's family is so silly. And I can't wait to hear her mother's explanation for all of this. hehe Keep up the awesome work! ^_^
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Reviewed By: Jessie Angel [MediaMiner Member] On: February 05, 2009 21:39 CST
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God I love Monopoly.... great plot by the way. You got me hooked, line and sinker!
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Reviewed By: elementalobsession09 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 31, 2009 23:08 CST
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Hahaha! I love it. I enjoy the arguing and sexual tension in fics more than I do the point when they finally get together I think. lol. Keep up the good work. I'm asuming they'll be arguing a lot in this fic. Can't wait to read more.
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Reviewed By: petpeeves123 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 28, 2009 13:13 CST
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interesting to say the least. Of course Kag is skeptable. He's using supernatural abilities lol
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Reviewed By: Moonlit Showers [MediaMiner Member] On: January 27, 2009 18:36 CST
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oooh I like Inuyasha's wings hehe. And the uniquiness of this story is really nice. I can't wait to see what happens next! Keep up the awesome work! ^_^
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Title: Lol!
Reviewed By: Lunabell [MediaMiner Member] On: January 27, 2009 17:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
He's afraid of a pink bike...O_O
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