| "The Top Predator" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: Kawa-Misuterii [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2009 17:11 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
It seems like your making a lot of references to the fact that's she's 'emo'. Well that's all fine and good, but for the most part college kids aren't that interested in fads. Plus, they tend to be a little more mature than to go around 'glaring' at people who look at their dye jobs. Now don't get me wrong, my hair happens to be blue, too. But unless she's a fashion major, you might want to focus a little bit less on her outfits and attitude to people who 'don't understand her', and a little bit more on plot and character development, which is going at an incredibly slow pace. I've got a feeling the anti-hero here is Sesshomaru? Try and give Kagome a little more personality than the typical big-mouthed chick with a chip on her shoulder(there are too much of those as it is), and this might have potential.
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Reviewed By: Lunabell [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2009 01:03 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay I'll add it to my favorites! I want to know what happens next! ^_^
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Reviewed By: Lunabell [MediaMiner Member] On: February 05, 2009 00:40 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sounds like a good story. So what's the pairing? I hope it's Inu/Kag. But if it's not I'll still read it. As long as you don't make inuyasha the villain.
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Reviewed By: huntressbella [MediaMiner Member] On: February 04, 2009 19:57 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, what a great story!! I can't wait to see what happens next! I've added it to my favorites. :)
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