| "One Equals Inconceivable Plus Reluctant" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] |
Title: This not a review
Reviewed By: Ladykaa28 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 18, 2009 01:37 CDT
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I have a suggestion. Is there anyway that you could do a fic that almost parallels this one? You mentioned that Inuyasha would be able to mate with Kagome when they found her. What about if they live til Kagome's time, but decide to stay together? They see Kagome and she has a good life having graduated high school, getting ready for college and even dating. She could interact with them, but they are happy with eachother even going so far as to adopt so orphans as heirs. So it won't exactly a sequel to this one, but you coud hint at it. If not it's ok.
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Reviewed By: angeluswilliams On: March 05, 2009 06:55 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please update
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Reviewed By: druspikeangel1 On: February 27, 2009 03:39 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I just started reading this fic and I am finding it funny poor Inuyasha his temper has got him in a situation looking for a mortality potion and ending up with something totally different.
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Reviewed By: Snowfall [MediaMiner Member] On: February 11, 2009 20:03 CST
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This has been a sweet little fic. Inu/Sess are my favorite pairing and I love the story 'Crucify My Love'. You did a great job in tracing a path to where the brothers are now. That's very difficult to do in such a short period of time. It is nice to finally see someone give Inuyasha the option of being with Kagome despite his relationship with Sess. That's in a fic that I'm writing and have yet to post. I like how you didn't have Inuyasha suddenly acquiesce to Sesshoumaru's request. It makes the story believable. Good job. I'd die if I did that many lemons all in a row. Those were hot. ----Because of the hell I've had to go through with grammar and developing depth through introspection, there a couple of things that I noticed and that I hope to help you with. Please don't be offended. We need every Inu/Sess writer we can get. ^_^ Any time that you use the words 'was' or 'is', check and see if it should be past tense, as in 'had'. That is the hardest one for me to keep on top of. Also, the fic would have better depth if there was more introspection. I had given myself a terrible migraine trying to figure out how to do that. Just ask yourself "Why?"...is a character acting or feeling a certain way and write it as detailed as you can. Believe me, much easier said than done. There are so many little things that take place that we don't realize should actually have that question answered. Introspection can be overdone though. You have to decide where you want to draw the line. It might help to read mshutts 'The Prophecy'. It has more introspection than I'd ever do, but it is a good example. You're right, there aren't enough Inu/Sess fics out there. I'd hunt up some recommendations, but I don't have time right now. Shoot me off an email to remind me and I'll go down my list. In the meantime, if you aren't already reading them, I'd recommend 'My Fraternal Romance' and 'It's My Life'. ^_^ You might also find quite a few on Y!Gallery. Snow
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Reviewed By: Ladykaa28 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 09, 2009 16:18 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I read the whole thing and I almost cried for them. It was like both of them had fears that needed to be resolved. Inuyasha's because he was left alone at an early age with no one left for him to really depend on and Sesshouamru also at an early age, but just to have his father come back to train him like a warrior than treat him like a son. One question is this the end or will there be more? To me its a good ending.
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Reviewed By: Polka Dot On: February 08, 2009 22:41 CST
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how sweet happy bros rumping in the cave. Zyphen has a nice pic that would go well with this.
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Reviewed By: my_[erversities On: February 08, 2009 13:31 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW!! I love it!!! This is sooo good!! I'm glad that Inu and Sessh finally mated...but just hope that Inu comes to realize he feels more for Sessh than he ever did for Kagome cuz him having an affair with her....ewwwwww....'specially when he has a hottie at home XD. I wondeded if you could make it MPreg too...I know you said that the demons slept with their same sexed parent to prevent pregnancy....but maybe you could have it that after they're mated same sex couples can then have children because one is classified as beta??? Maybe?? Anyways...great story love to see more!!!
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