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| "Candle in the Wind" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Reviewed By: Megami no Akari [MediaMiner Member] On: February 24, 2009 08:11 CST
Comment/Review:
Thanks for the review. Gaara does seem out of character. Gaara was a rather rough character as a genin but no less intelligent. After watching Shippuden and observing Gaara, I noticed that he matured a great deal, mentally and physically. He is Kazekage now afterall. I wanted that to be reflected in my writing.
| Title: ch 1-3
Reviewed By: lavie [MediaMiner Member] On: February 24, 2009 07:38 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Comment/Review:
thanks for writing! it's good, although I skip over some of the more detailed stuff that i don't believe is important like in the beginning. the way you write Gaara - he doesn't seem to be much in character, but i guess time has changed him. from his choice of words and way of speaking, reminds me of the way someone much older than he is would speak. When Sakura's response to Gaara was, "I... eh... What?" - that was funny! i did notice some minor grammatical errors and some duplications of a word/phrases in the same sentence which sound off - so i'm guessing you simply haven't gotten your work properly proof-read by a beta or otherwise. anyway, no biggie. look forward to your next chapter! oyasumi!
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