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| "Late" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Title: great start
Reviewed By: animecraz92 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 14, 2009 07:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Comment/Review:
this is a very interesting beginning to ur story. please continue 2 work diligently on it and not give up on ur story like so many other authors have done in the past wit their wonderful stories. im lookin forward to the rest of ur story.
| Title: Not Bashing....
Reviewed By: GloomingPeace On: March 14, 2009 04:39 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Um, dude.... I'm not bashing, but I gotta tell you that it is a REALLY BAD IDEA to use online translators! It goes for all languages. If you're going to use some other language this much in your story, it should be one you KNOW or at least have basic knowledge as to realize when then online tranlators misinform you (which is almost always). If you want to use Spanish, I would recommend that you research the phrases you want to use, look into grammar rueles, etc. There is nothing worse than reading something where someone is trying to portray a specific image and ends up failing miserably just because they didn't do their research. I can almost guarantee you that the phrases you've used so far can be found in their correct form by a simple GOOGLE seearch! Again, not bashing. It's advice from one writer to another. I don't really venture into fics but I am very meticulous in my research. When I'm not sure about a word/fact/deatail, I look into it. and it's really the best way to make your story come to life. I've read psychologic profiles, obscure history, ancient rituals... you name it. And of course I take after experienced (real) writers. Some spend months or longer researching for their novels, and often, they even cite their sources at the end of it all. Of course, I'm not asking you to do this. But I think you have a "gem in the rough" with this story (at least I do for now, since I don't really know where you're planning to take it) and the crappy Spanish is really ruining it. I have more problems with the WRITING but ultimately, that's something you've got to develop and figure out yourself. The story itself is good. The best friend thing is old but I find their attitudes to be the bew twist. Rarely is Kagome so accepting of InuYasha's commanding behavior, and rarely is he so openly needy of her. If I didn't think there was room for improvement, I wouldn't even have bothered. I'll be looking out for the next chapter. Laters.
| Title: Nice
Reviewed By: MikoPrincess16 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 13, 2009 16:36 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Me gusta! :) Continue por favor! p.s. I like your spanish input! I know quite a bit but i still don't consider myself fluent! Pero, me gusta! Update soon!
| Title: Nice Start
Reviewed By: HanyouBackTracker On: February 25, 2009 15:14 CST
Comment/Review:
Interesting start I have a feeling that Kagome & Inuyasha relationship is going to change fairly quickly but I look forward to reading more also don't worry about reviews they will come until next time. Take Care.
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