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Reviewed By: Mortal shadow On: July 22, 2009 16:07 CDT
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You said to let u know who to include in the fic so here it is,I wondered what happened with Gemming and Changming.I also figure Kaito would be extremely powerful by now and since his A-Hole brother is dead he could come back from exile to help with the wraith problem.Anupu would also be massively powerful if he's still alive.It's good to hear you're going to let Sess be his old deadly self after all he doesnt have his name for nothing.Naraku and Ishin should be even more lethal now since they've lived so long I say let them show their old dangerous selves too.The longer the story the better :)
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Reviewed By: erinnight [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2009 16:32 CDT
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I've been wondering about Akemi! Where did she and the dragons go? Why hasn't she been in this so far? She and Asuna used to be so close... I'm very glad that you're bringing her back. She was probably my favorite character, besides Ishin and Tekeshi. Such sweet boys... Oh, and Shezmu too! Haha, update soon!
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Reviewed By: Mortal shadow On: July 18, 2009 15:50 CDT
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I love what youve done with Grimmjow you're a talented writer.Keep up the good work and don't forget Tekeshi and the others.I love Asuna's character after all she's doing what every woman would if we could ,having every gorgeous male possible :)
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Reviewed By: KizzyKitty [MediaMiner Member] On: June 14, 2009 07:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Aww I hope you're getting better quickly. Hospitals aren't much fun. Get well and i'm looking forward to your next chapter. Your Biggest Fan Kiz
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Title: The Heirs Apparent
Reviewed By: mortalshadow [MediaMiner Member] On: May 11, 2009 14:38 CDT
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Thankyou,Thankyou! for bringing back some of my favourite characters.I'm enjoying your fic immensely.
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Reviewed By: KizzyKitty [MediaMiner Member] On: April 22, 2009 11:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! That was one of the best chapters since Asuna was brought back! Please keep up the good work and I look forward to the next chapter XD Your Biggest Fan Kiz
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Reviewed By: Milligan Girl On: April 17, 2009 15:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
All I wanted to let you know was that I completely adore your stories. I completely read I am the moon, and I just finished reading the chapters you have up of The Heirs apparant, and I absolutely love them all. I can't wait to read more as the story continues to unfold.
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Title: The Heirs Apparent
Reviewed By: Mortal shadow On: April 09, 2009 05:55 CDT
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Just thought I'd let u know u left out Hiroto and Kazuo with Sheng and Hana with Tekeshi.
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Reviewed By: Invite On: April 08, 2009 18:21 CDT
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Still amazing! My favourite fanfiction series to date. I can't get enough. Thank you for the wonderful story.
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Title: The Heirs Apparent
Reviewed By: Mortal shadow On: April 03, 2009 07:59 CDT
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I have never written a review b4 but I love your fic so much I decided 2 give it a shot.I'm nearly at the end of I am The Moon but couldnt resist taking a peek at this fic.I love that u write really long fics with a good story as well as the sex.Your spelling mistakes don't really bother me as I can usually guess what u mean't 2 put and I think an excellent story is more important than a few errors.The only mistake that bothers me is when u put the word violation when u mean volition,where one implies something akin 2 rape what u meant was the body moving of its own accord.I know this fic is meant 2b about Asunas heirs but I find Asuna and Naraku,Ishin,Nobu,Yuudai and Eyal as well as Sesshomaru r much more interesting.Please don't let the characters I just mentioned die they deserve 2 live after all youve put them through and they're my favourites.I would love it if Asuna and Yuudai got back together permanently and it would be great if Asuna got pregnant 2 both Naraku and Yuudai again and gave birth 2 Nori and Kenichi.I love the character Yuudai and he should be with Asuna and get his son back because he loved him so much.I cant stand Ichigo I dont find him hot at all Grimmjow is way hotter in my opinion.I think Asuna should have way more steamy sex with Naraku,Ishin,Nobu,Eyal and Yuudai she's been neglecting them.I wish u could bring back Tekeshi he was one of my favourite characters and his time with Asuna was 2 short his whole family was practically wiped out and he lost his only daughter.It would also be great 2 have Mingli back ,she did promise him a child afterall and I liked him way more than Quon.I wondered what happened 2 Sheng I really liked both Sheng and Jin I hated how Jin died I had hoped he was possessed by a wraith like Eyal had been as the way he behaved was so out of character at least then Asuna could have gone back and saved him and continued 2 have hot encounters with him I loved his naughty forceful nature.I also wanted her 2 work things out with Sheng.I wanted him 2b one of her permanent lovers as well as Jin.What ever happened 2 Ang Chi? He wasn't there when Asuna was returned 2 life.Nahut is another one that wasn't there.I have one criticism that I hope u wont take offense to and that is Nobus use of modern medical equipment.While I understand it's the modern era and some medical tools would be better 2 use It doesn't make sense 2 me that he would use an ultrasound 2c if someones pregnant since he could tell straight away with his kumo senses b4.Also why stitches when his silk was so much better and the venoms,herbs etc that he used 2 use were better than most of the modern human stuff.He just seems 2 use some equipment to do things that he could do b4 easily without it.He seems a little 2 modern 2 me I can understand using it on humans 2 hide what he is but on youkai I would think he'd use his natural abilities still.This is just my opinion so please don't take offense.I,m looking forward 2 reading The Heirs Apparent I hope it's as long or longer than I am The Moon which I am greatly enjoying.I also look forward 2 your fic on Vlad however I've been unable 2 find it as yet.I believe the purpose of a good fic is 2 allow the reader 2 escape into the imaginery world created by the writer and forget the stresses of everyday life for a short time.In my opinion u write a really good fic.I know this was a long review.I have OCD and cant help it.May u continue 2 write many more enjoyable fics u are my favourite author.
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Title: Oh Noes!!
Reviewed By: KizzyKitty [MediaMiner Member] On: March 30, 2009 00:30 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG this fic is just getting better and better! I don't know whether to feel sorry for Rishou or happy lol I hope Kazuo comes back into the fic, and Yuzuna too. Hmmm perhaps Yuzuna could be brought back and made into an Espada? XD That would cause all kinds of hell for her poor family. Sessomaru has and always will be my favourite character in the Inuyasha series. Is it possible to have him appear more in the story? Ooh and Yuudai and Asuna really need to get their act together and just get back with eachother lol Really great fic so far! I can't wait for the next chapter! Your Biggest Fan Kiz
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Reviewed By: Invite On: March 24, 2009 21:28 CDT
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I am loving the sequel! And especially the fast updates. I am so happy that Lady Asuna was brought back!
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Title: XD
Reviewed By: KizzyKitty [MediaMiner Member] On: March 20, 2009 15:13 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm loving this story more and more with each chapter I read! Keep up the good work! Your Biggest Fan Kiz
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Title: Yuudai! Yay!
Reviewed By: KizzyKitty [MediaMiner Member] On: March 14, 2009 02:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is getting so good! I can't wait for the next chapter XD It would be awesome to see more IchigoxAsuna lol and I wonder what Rukia thinks of those two getting so close...lol I am a drama whore. I just can't get enough of it XD Your Biggest Fan Kiz
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Title: The Heirs Apparent
Reviewed By: KizzyKitty [MediaMiner Member] On: March 05, 2009 11:50 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You're stories are thrilling to read and constantly have me on the end of my seat. I would have rated you're spelling at 10 but I have seen a few spelling mistakes. I would say mostly made out of being tired. For example the japanese word is 'youkai' not 'youki'. I love you're stories but I dearly miss Lady Asuna. Please tell me that she'll be brought back to life? I would be the happiest person on the planet if she were to be brought back to life and have a dramatic reunion with her father and mother. I can only imagine the tears lol Well again I love your stories so far and I am eagerly waiting for the next chapter of The Heirs Apparent. Your biggest fan Kiz
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