"The second to last pure, yet not quite so sane, human" Reviews/Comments [ 15 ] |
Title: in need of another chapter Reviewed By: Spygurl155 On: November 14, 2014 19:35 EST Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I really enjoy reading your story and wish you would write another
chapter to it ASAP. I can't wait to see what happens to Gabriel and
Zonta. I'm curious to know if the sex the two of them had was near
the start of Zonta's heat. I only wonder this because in the last
chapter it sounded like Zonta was going into heat. I arrived to
this thought only because Zonta had smelled Gabriel to have a
slight fruity scent and the fact that Zonta seems to have quite a
bit of sexual thoughts on his little Nikea.
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Title: Still interested Reviewed By: Yam 88 On: February 19, 2013 01:29 EST Comment/Review: Please update |
Reviewed By: Jo On: May 21, 2011 20:25 EDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review: I like your story I hope to see a new chapter with spelling and grammer was little here and their. I can't wait until the next chapter is up. |
Reviewed By: Madwren On: January 31, 2011 16:36 EST Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: OMG I LOVE LOVE LOVE THIS!!!!!! Please please please update when you can!!! Gabe and Zonta make my day!! And you did great with Max too!!! Please keep up the amazing work!!!! I be watching for an update!!! :D |
Reviewed By: moimoi-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: August 07, 2010 20:36 EDT Comment/Review: lol the end was too funny, thanks for writing!
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Title: WOW Reviewed By: solitude_in_motion [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2010 05:22 EST Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: Poor guy...I hope it ends happy for him. I reviewed finally right? ^^ I hope you update thiz!
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Reviewed By: jezzy On: March 10, 2010 04:25 EST Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: Oh crap they just made it a hell of lot worse for themselves. Although I do agree self defense or not that was brutal! I wouldn't have put him in a cell though(maybe a straight jacket _-;) ...just lock the room and have a guard there.
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Reviewed By: Jezzy On: March 10, 2010 01:59 EST Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10 Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review: right I don't think anyone can be confused with the personality change if he didnt act that way I'd be disturbed It is gruesome and gorey I usually don't do that but this is so interesting that that just adds on to it. I do feel sorry for the poor disturbed manic though. I like your writing^^
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Reviewed By: hi On: March 09, 2010 04:26 EST Comment/Review: they have a thing for naming people dont they? Wow I like the orginal better but this is sooo....cool. Oh god there goes my lanuage! Seriously gorey but awesome You should lookinto doign a collab!
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Title: Musings and Squee Reviewed By: Yet Another Grammar Nazi On: October 29, 2009 08:50 EDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 2 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10 Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review: Wow! A fanfic for Last Pure Human--awesome! I just read your story through chapter 9. I love how Gabriel's personality is just about the opposite of Zonta's. And you have the TLPH world down a lot better than the other few fanfics for it out there. I like how things actually HAPPEN IN AN EXPEDIENT MANNER in your AU, a rather annoying flaw in the original. Although hey, the original has smut (yay!) while yours has *shudders* really gory shit. If Animal X wasn't my favorite manga series (pretty damn gory, fyi), I don't think I would be able to handle the gore and violence in your story, but alas, I have been desensitized so I think your story is wonderful! The only thing that bothers me is your spelling/grammar. It kind of sucks. I've had to copy the story onto a Word document and edit it just to make it bearable. Just because it's a word doesn't mean it's the right word. I think that you would get a lot more continuing readers if you found someone to edit it. I've already basically done most of it, so if you want a proofread version, here's my email: trombonesonmars@wildblue.net (I barely use this address, so I don't mind putting it on the interwebs) Also--it's pretty hard to find your story here. Have you considered putting what's been completed so far up somewhere that gets more traffic. It's an excellent fic and it deserves more readers!
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Reviewed By: moimoi-chan too lazy to sign in On: September 29, 2009 21:33 EDT Comment/Review: yay! you updated!!!! now you have to write more! :) haha poor kasan's in max's bad books...
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Reviewed By: moimoi-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: July 03, 2009 13:34 EDT Comment/Review: i love your Zonta! and i'm wondering if poor Gabriel will ever meet up with Max.
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Title: The second to last pure, yet not quite so sane, human Reviewed By: Jo On: May 31, 2009 23:52 EDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review: I love this story,because it picks up were the other story that goes to this one mite end. and Gebriel in this story is funny. I can't stop lol. I hope you up date soon. I also want to know why did you Take this off of adult fanfliction .com.
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Title: OMG I can't take this!!!! Reviewed By: Greenhorn [MediaMiner Member] On: April 11, 2009 14:08 EDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: Congrats!!! Due to Chapter 5, I have now cried during two of your stories... You really are truly amazing!! My reaction to the cliffie at the end of chapter 7 was "FUUUUUUUUUUUUUCK!!!!" (especially after I realized I couldn't go to the next chapter). You have definitely done TwistedHilarity justice... I was wondering though, is this a collaboration or something? It would be really cool if the original intersects with this. You both have your own style of writing and I would love to see Gabe in the Original. Keep up the terrific work!!
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Reviewed By: ReitaBabyReita On: March 08, 2009 04:49 EDT Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: I love this fic! Please continue it, I can't wait tofind out what's going to happen! It's as addictive as TwistedHilarity's original!
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