| "Control. Infirmity. Defiance." Reviews/Comments [ 39 ] |
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Reviewed By: jflorea [MediaMiner Member] On: May 05, 2009 22:35 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great chapter! And no Inuyasha, she doesn't know...she needs you to tell her. :)
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Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: April 16, 2009 08:17 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
lol creepy... I would have though that the flowers would be to confuse and make youki think that there were no humans in the village (lack of 'human' scent) but I like your version better very creepy!!!
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Reviewed By: phalon (nsi) On: April 16, 2009 01:35 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh, wow. Of course Kagome's condition gets worst. I see now that Kikyou is going to have to help Fluffy-Hime, instead of Kagome doing it. Poor Yasha, not able to comfort Kagome right. I can't wait for more!
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Reviewed By: phalon (nsi) On: April 16, 2009 01:22 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Gotta love your stories. This has to be one of my favorite stories of yours. Drama = Win.
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Reviewed By: angel-up-above-heaven [MediaMiner Member] On: April 15, 2009 08:25 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
crying blood?? holy hell! i must know more!! and hmmm Inuyasha, GET SMARTER!!!!
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Reviewed By: Selina MacCloveror [MediaMiner Member] On: April 14, 2009 15:23 EDT
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Awesome chapter, girlie! I feel for InuYasha (as usual, LOL) as he struggles to figure out how to deal with the already crazy (but now even more so) emotions of females. I'm curious as to how this is all going to wrap up with half of the girls' souls in each of them; I have to figure one of them is going to eventually die and the missing half would return to the remaining woman, but I suppose that would be too easy, ne? I'm sure you're going to come up with something super-creative, and I'm excited to see what it will be! (Not TOO exciting...I'm hoping this story will be longer than that!) I'm feeling for Sango, too, as I'm sure is expected. Kohaku will always be a source of confusion and torment for her, and this news about possibly being able to overcome the darkness of the shard (or not being able to, rather) is obviously going to bring her even more heartache. But Miroku was awesome in that scene; every bit the supportive friend (or fiance) without sugar-coating the truth for her. Loves him! Great chapter! Can't wait to see the battle go down in the next!
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Title: Chapter 3
Reviewed By: LuxKen27 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 14, 2009 14:04 EDT
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Ahhh, another excellent effort! :) Very interesting to see both Kikyo and Kagome feel like they are at a loss of control at the beginning. You make Kikyo seem very sympathetic here, a nice feat considering where she left off in the last chapter, heh. It's also nice to see Kagome overcoming a bit of her angst, finally - it seems so strange to see her depressed! is this really Saint Kagome we're talking about, the eternal optimist who can't even think badly of her romantic rival? :P Hehe. Let's see, what else...there's so much going on it's hard to remember what to comment on! I like the segue back into the manga, very nicely done ~ and I look forward to seeing how the situation plays out now that the Inutachi has been reorganized.
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Title: Very Awesome:)
Reviewed By: LustfulBeast [MediaMiner Member] On: March 24, 2009 18:35 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, this is really good! Its interesting to see how Kagome deals with Kikyo's emotions and how Kikyo deals with Kagome's. I guess less of a soul makes ya a little cranky. I can't wait till the next chapter^^.
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Reviewed By: kokoronagomu [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2009 16:19 EDT
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definition: crocodile tears- a hypocritical display of sorrow; false or insincere weeping. ~ i believe a better phrase would possibly be 'bitter tears'. IMHO ♣ human nature is to jump to conclusions but if he had reviewed his words and her typical responses then he would have known why she had been radiating such feelings. ♠ one hasn't a clue as to where you are taking this but it promises to be one heck of a ride! ♥
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Title: Chapter 2
Reviewed By: LuxKen27 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2009 15:54 EDT
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Another excellent, intriguing entry! :) You did well with the opening, and Sesshoumaru's deep thoughts, about himself and his situation. I like the way you reordered events here, and I think you did an especially nice job portraying his inner self without letting it spill too far over into his outer expression. I sense his calm and determination, even as he watches over his odd little pack :) The rest of the chapter was equally strong, and it was great to get inside the heads of our main players! I like the idea of Kikyo struggling with Kagome's emotions, but still so cold and analytical as to recognize and categorize them. The love and jealousy both girls feel over each others' interaction with Inuyasha was really nicely played. At the same time, you've done a marvellous job with Inuyasha, showing his grumpy gruffness in his dealings with both girls, even though its obvious his preference between them. I look forward to seeing his interaction with Kagome on the other side! Girl needs to wake up and stop wallowing in self-pity, haha. You two are truly doing a fabulous job with this; if you like, I can still direct you to a couple of excellent examples of Sess characterization to really round this all off :)
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Reviewed By: Selina MacCloveror [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2009 11:44 EDT
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I am FREAKING OUT!! Not only does Kikyou seem more like Kagome from absorbing more of the latter's soul, but now Kagome is acting more like Kikyou! O.o Man, she even got fed up with Shippou! Although his little tactic WAS pretty annoying.... And then her mom, too! Whoa! I'm officially addicted. Love it, girlie, and I can't wait for the next chapter! Oh, by far my favorite line: "Stop the world, I want to get off." XD That totally sounded like you. *smiles*
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Reviewed By: wbk [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2009 07:34 EDT
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i have to admit that this story has grabbed my full attention. there are so many questions floating through my mind now. it seems as if kikyou is gaining more of kagome's emotions all the time. is kagome unknowingly transfering more of herself with each contact? will this emotional switch ultimately make them into the other? will inuyasha become confused as to which of the two has the greater part of the soul that he loves? the bitterness and self-pity that kagome is feeling has me a little on edge. it seems to give her a hard edge that was clearest in her thoughts of her mother. and now sesshoumaru has joined the story! i will wait with great anticipation for the next chapter.
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Reviewed By: angel-up-above-heaven [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2009 06:59 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*squeales* OOoooo i wanto read more!!! *looks around* i was soo into it, and then BAM it was over T_T *still looking around* maybe ill read the chapter again :P
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Reviewed By: werewolfgirl3 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 20, 2009 19:34 EDT
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keep it up! me loves it! this is definatly a new idea;having Kagome save Kikyo by a soul transfer and "soul barrier"
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Title: nice
Reviewed By: xxxshikonxxx [MediaMiner Member] On: March 12, 2009 05:34 EDT
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great story! can't wait for the next chapter
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