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| "The Journal" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Title: darkil
Reviewed By: Darkil [MediaMiner Member] On: June 10, 2009 04:25 CDT
Comment/Review:
u need to write more chapters, its a good story, but when it comes back to the older version, I'd switch to 3rd person, makes it easier to tell the difference and makes the journal seem more like a journal, LOL
| Title: heyy
Reviewed By: BabaTellsFortune On: March 19, 2009 02:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
please continue! this is a very nice angle to view inuyashas life. i'm really enjoying your story ^_^
| Reviewed By: darkil On: March 17, 2009 16:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
1st person is a hard point of view to write in, and sometimes if you aren't a pro it makes it seem fake, cause you have to know the character enough to be the character, I know from experience, and u did better then i usually do in 1st person, anyway, pretty good other then that, you are devinatly not the only one that has trouble with that btw, oh, and Inuyasha never really met his father, the great Inu No Tasho died the day Inuyasha was born, as long as you are trying to go mostly by the real story that is, love your idea though, think I'm gonna do something like it, probably won't publish it thou, if I do, I'll make sure to give you credit, sorry if i was to harsh in judging, some people are over sensitive, i just usually read only the award winning Fics, so not saying ur bad, just letting you know that 1st person stories are rough territory. Btw, this is my first review ever, my old Phone would only let me read the fics not review, butnow I got an iPhone =D now I'm off to finally review some stories I've been meaning to for a while now, keep writing, its the only way you'll become a pro =D
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