| "Loyalty, Love, and the Battle Between" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: nightshade41230 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 24, 2009 22:40 CDT
Comment/Review:
I can't wait to read some more of this story ,,it was wonderful..
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Reviewed By: Lady Hiroko [MediaMiner Member] On: May 29, 2009 23:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I agree with Ishellmay. You do need to keep your tenses constant. Try to blend the scenes in a bit but not to the point where it's confusing. What I mean is, don't constantly jump from one person to the other and back again. The prologue should start with Sesshomaru and the second half Inuyasha. Spelling and grammer is alright. I enjoyed the fic and would like to see you stick with it to the bitter end.
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Reviewed By: volleygirl07 On: April 05, 2009 21:39 CDT
Comment/Review:
I like the beginning. Keep updating!
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Reviewed By: Ishellmay [MediaMiner Member] On: March 14, 2009 18:15 CDT
Comment/Review:
It was really good. my only advice: make sure your tenses are constant. ex) she felt sad he leave her. -> She felt sad he left her. Keep up the great work!
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