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| "Just friends" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Reviewed By: bloodthirstynekoyokaigirlxd [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2009 19:44 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
i like this one too.. lol.. sometimes that is how i could see them both reacting one day, just getting it on in the bottom of the well.. lol
| Reviewed By: Kawa-Misuterii [MediaMiner Member] On: March 15, 2009 10:16 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ah hah...WOW. Umm...okay, that was kind of weird...First, I think a serious grammar check wouldn't hurt. After that, you might want to try fixing the formatting, it's a little messed up. Then you might want to reconsider their inner thoughts, they didn't seem very realistic...take it a little slower, put some more feeling into it...The Plot, on the other hand, is so true and real that it's painful, so it's a great start. Keep trying.
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