| "My Succubus Girlfriend" Reviews/Comments [ 64 ] |
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Reviewed By: dreamer789 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 23, 2011 11:17 EST
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Oh wow!! That was so good! Are you still planning on writing a sequel? I daly hope so, this was such an amazing story I would love to see where it goes from here!! Please do!! |
Reviewed By: inyu01 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 13, 2010 22:11 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
THIS STORY WAS AWSOME...I THINK U R AN A GREAT AUTHOR!!!
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Title: loved it more
Reviewed By: mickiressa [MediaMiner Member] On: October 21, 2009 02:38 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really liked it or loved it I should say. I've read succubus stories before but they were more or less just about the sex you built up a story around the characters instead of them just having wild monkey sex all the time. I can't wait for you to start posting the chapters for the sequel since I think the relationship with Kagome and InuYasha will work itself out especially after she has the baby. The twists you throw out are unlike any other vampires feeding on succubi that was awesome I would have never thought of that in a million years. You did kind of leave the whole demon thing in Sango thing kind of open I was wondering if you were going to explain that more in the sequel, becasue I'd really like to know. And i'd love to be a beta reader since I have nothing better to do besides try to find a job this economy sucks. Back to the fic I really enjoyed it, can't wait for the sequel, and write when you can.
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Reviewed By: Arelia [MediaMiner Member] On: September 06, 2009 14:12 EDT
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I know you think that this wasn't the best story it could be, but I thought it was so good! I absolutely loved it! I'm so excited for the sequel!
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Title: Loved it
Reviewed By: JtTeE [MediaMiner Member] On: August 28, 2009 18:02 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a wonderful fic. The plot is weaved very well with suitable original background stories and humor interlaced throughout. Of course the impressive lemons help too ;). The only thing I can say (as you've pointed out yourself) is that the wonderfulness is sometimes inconsistent. Some chapters are beautifully crafted while others seem to just barely string the story together. Albeit all that, I'd rank this story among my top 15 fics of all time (considering I've easily read at least ten million words worth of fics over the years, that's pretty impressive!). I completely understand writing most of the sequel before releasing it (heck, I started a story something like 2 years ago and am still picking at the first few chapters - probably never to be released :P). If you're still looking for a beta, I wouldn't mind trying to give you a hand. You can e-mail me through my profile. Otherwise, I'll be eagerly awaiting your sequel!
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Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2009 19:40 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great ending!!!! its fantastic that there is going to be a sequel!!!
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Title: Satisfied!
Reviewed By: Kawaii-KeKe-Chan [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2009 10:06 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story deserves so many more reviews!!! I know what you mean about things not turning out the way you imagined them; but alas, such is the fate of a writer! I really enjoyed the way you wrapped things up! I was scared after reading your AN that there would be no conclusion to Inu and Kag, but when Kag walked into the cafe- yay!!! ^^ And she's staying! Wohoo! I think you've done an excellent job with this; it's one of my fav Inu Kags, and I've been reading them for about 5 years! Will defo be reccommending this story to my own readers! ^^ Can't wait for the sequel!!
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Reviewed By: angel-up-above-heaven [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2009 08:39 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hmmm, well i cant wait for the sequel ^___^ it kinda did gave me more questions XD so now Inuyasha is like half demon hmm?? im hoping to see him snap in the sequel XD
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Reviewed By: Kristin M On: July 12, 2009 03:03 EDT
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YES!!!! They are going to try it together!!! Can't wait for the sequel!
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Reviewed By: VuzeGo On: July 12, 2009 02:08 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really enjoyed reading the story and I look forward to reading the sequel! I really did like the way you incorporated Inuyasha becoming a hanyou into the story. It was unique and fit the story so well. Keep up the good work!
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Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2009 01:43 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wonderful story... really liked it... interesting ending... good job... great work! looking forward to the sequel... until next time...
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Reviewed By: AvidRabid [MediaMiner Member] On: July 11, 2009 22:30 EDT
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i dont know what you were so worried about, yes the second to last chapter left a lot to be desired, but the last one capped everything up well enough for me... i dont like sango/miroku related stuff all that much anyway, so the fact that we didnt resolve there problems doesnt bother me in the lease... good job, and im glad you learned something.
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Reviewed By: Kawa-Misuterii [MediaMiner Member] On: July 11, 2009 22:23 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
no, it was good! I feel bad for Inuyasha, but it worked out pretty well, I think. Stop putting yourself down, this is a great fic!
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Reviewed By: angel-up-above-heaven [MediaMiner Member] On: July 01, 2009 10:23 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*gasps* we better get a happy ending... and god there was alot happened in that chapter lol... im happy that Sango is away fron Naraku... so wait does that mean that Naraku wasnt truely a vampire?? and n'aww i do feel for Inuyasha, for being betrayed and all =( lets hope for a happy ending ^__^
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Reviewed By: ardy1 On: June 30, 2009 18:11 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
First, I have to say this has been a marvelous story, particularly for its originality. That said, I must weigh in with my objections. I am not a fan of stories that reveal everything from the getgo, but I can't help thinking you have swung too far the other direction. You've indicated that there is only an epilogue left, and yet there are so many questions still unanswered! Sango's magical abilities, and how she gained them? And is it really appropriate to wait for the epilogue to deal with her 'redemption'? The role of land gods? Then there's Miroku's role - it seemed wholly random - did he come into possession of the tomb purely by his association with Inuyasha? What, aside from proximity, made him capable of attaching and ingratiating himself with a trained assasin of Sango's character (again, a bit late in the game to explain all in the epilogue)? Is it left to the reader to interpolate Kouga, et al, and their role in the story? I think I've provided enough examples. If you're building towards a series of stories I can see why you would want to keep some mysteries. Likewise, there is value to granting much to the reader's imagination. But I still think this has been, at the very least, paced awkwardly, despite a very sound premise and facinating plotline. I hope you plan to write more, since it is apparent that you have a creative imagination and control of plot and character (even if I don't always agree with your take on such). More practice would allow you to work out the kinks in timing, exposition, and character development that this endeavor has, to date, lacked.
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