| "Fantasy" Reviews/Comments [ 15 ] |
Reviewed By: Ditany [MediaMiner Member] On: October 31, 2009 20:10 CDT
Comment/Review:
Good work for it being your first fic with lemon, very nice story. I hope you update soon keep up the good work.
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Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: August 10, 2009 21:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
lovely!
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Reviewed By: crazykiss [MediaMiner Member] On: August 09, 2009 10:07 CDT
Comment/Review:
I like this story but i think you should use a little less dialogue and have spaces between paragraphs. Other than that though, great job
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Reviewed By: Kawa-Misuterii [MediaMiner Member] On: August 09, 2009 10:03 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is great! In fact, the only thing I can say is that you should probably put some spaces between your paragraphs, it kind looks like a big blob of words right now. Other than that, great work, can't wait for the next update!
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Reviewed By: arizonasiren1 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 09, 2009 02:19 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Still lovin it. Can't wait for next update.
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Reviewed By: SelinaA [MediaMiner Member] On: July 16, 2009 04:57 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Its great
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Reviewed By: Mharz 21 On: July 06, 2009 03:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Although the storyline is not original, it may still be improved in the coming chapters by inserting twists or turn events that are most likely unexpected and let characters do something that are not always what is expected of them. This way, you'll have almost similar but definitely original. Need to improved on discussion, make it more lively Sorry about that. But I like you story and hope you'll continue writing this one... Good luck!
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Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: June 19, 2009 04:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
lol why do I feel an evil laugh coming on... I can wait to see there faces (or have them described) when they figure out that they are actually ENGAGED to each other!!!!
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Reviewed By: mariposa_miko [MediaMiner Member] On: June 18, 2009 01:05 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
that was really good! i cant wait for the next update!
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Reviewed By: arizonasiren [MediaMiner Member] On: April 19, 2009 19:11 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love it. Keep up the good work. Can't wait for next update.
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Reviewed By: LadyCash [MediaMiner Member] On: April 13, 2009 18:31 CDT
Comment/Review:
Should be interesting when K meets her fiance. I expect quite the good time, lol.
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Reviewed By: Lynzi18 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 13, 2009 13:30 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nice work for a first lemon fic...looking forward to reading the next chapter lol. keep up the good work :)
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Reviewed By: Inuyashalover829 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 13, 2009 09:23 CDT
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wow for this being your first lemony fic its really good whenever i tried it came out all weird....anyways this is an amazing story so far and PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!
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Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: April 12, 2009 19:14 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
unless the guy is rich and famous... or has an open blog or twitter or some other junk that us cyber geeks use... and uses their real name... which is going to lead to real life stalking...
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Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: April 12, 2009 19:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
you know she could even just do a Los Vegas marriage and then she wouldn't have to marry "that guy" and she wouldn't even need to lose her virginity... just quick and in the same country... and then she is saved by the law... (note I cant find Myself on google.. other than I general don't use my real name on the net and some one else has my name (first and last, but not middle name)(a very blonde woman...)and the name I use for my username is practically a real word any way...)
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